Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The 21st century is an era of booming information, as well as flourishing entertainment. In this case, movies and televisions have taken an increasingly important role in our everyday life. Some people argue that these two ways of entertainment tend to affect young people in a negative way rather than positively. From my perspective, I believe that the disadvantages of them do outweigh the advantages.
First of all, as is constantly witnessed, there are excessive violent content on programs and films that people watch every day. An indiscriminate exposure to those content can cast a long shadow on children's development, since children lack some basic judgements and the visual representation is far more impressive than parents' preach. To be more specific, children are good at imitation, to which programs and films are the commonest source. What can happen after a child watches violent movies can be inestimable and terrible. For example. my cousin Nathan got a punishment for his misbehaving at school, which is a consequence of imitating what people on the TV did. Thus, young people's behavior can be negatively influenced by violent contents showed on TV or movies.
In addition, the obsession to TV and movies itself can be a serious problem that alienate young people from good behaviors. None of us can deny that entertainments are more attractive than work or study. The programs and films today are getting more and more eye-popping in order to appeal to more audience. Young people, who are more susceptible to seductions, can easily get addicted to them. As a consequence, their academic performance will be less desirable, which will get in the way of their future career hunting. What is worse, more time spent being a couch potato means less time for doing sports, and then their physical conditions will get worse.
The negative impacts of movies and televisions on young people's behavior are a serious fact that people should not ignore. To eliminate those effects, maybe more restrictions and regulations applied on them are in need.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, then, thus, well, for example, in addition, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16913946588 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96175137791 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569732937685 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0220000491 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7777777778 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183085169003 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569593693631 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502575823088 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127200945943 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371191758126 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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