Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People do various jobs in their life time, some work in a part time job, some work for experience, for money or sometimes for free. Some look for a well-paid job while others prefer the kind of job which excites them. In my opinion, one should be passionate about their work and should consider a healthy working environment as important aspects of a job. Hence, I would disagree with the statement that the most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns.
Working in a job can be hectic for many people. Even we hear from many of our friends and colleagues complaining about their jobs and it shows that it doesn't matter how much they are earning; they are not liking their jobs because of lack of passion. If the same people were working in a job they were passionate about, or something which excites them, then they were not be complaining. For example, in college, a friend of mine was passionate about vocals but stopped practicing because his parents pressurized him to join the family business. He was earning quite well but wasn't confident about it. After a while, he left his father's business and started singing. Of course, he wasn't earning as much as he used to, but now when I meet him, he is always talking about how much exciting his work is and what joy he gains while performing for people. This shows that no matter how much people earn, it will never be enough or they will always be complaining about something if the job they are doing isn't of their interest.
Moreover, people prefer a safe and hygienic working environment. Of course, the amount of money in a job matters, but if you are earning a great amount in a very unhealthy and unsafe place, the job and the money isn't worth it. For example, one of my friends used to work in a call center in a night shift. The amount she was earning was good enough for the job but the environment of her office was not well maintained. Furthermore, the area in which her office was, wasn't safe for women and she always had to ask her colleagues for dropping her off or to walk with her. The money was good, but the amount does not make sense if you are not feeling safe or you need to be dependent on someone else for your safety.
There are many other reasons why one can consider money not the major factor in a job like people's relations with their boss or colleagues, or they are not seeing any progress in their position or their work. These are some factors which are given preference over the amount of money earning. Hence, I would disagree that money is the most important aspect of a job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: lifetime
People do various jobs in their life time, some work in a part time job, some wor...
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...jobs in their life time, some work in a part time job, some work for experience, for mone...
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...t of a job is the money a person earns. Working in a job can be hectic for many ...
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...g about their jobs and it shows that it doesnt matter how much they are earning; they ...
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... matter how much they are earning; they are not liking their jobs because of lack of passion. ...
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...business. He was earning quite well but wasnt confident about it. After a while, he l...
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...ness and started singing. Of course, he wasnt earning as much as he used to, but now ...
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...endent on someone else for your safety. There are many other reasons why one can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, while, for example, kind of, of course, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45684210526 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32859997409 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450526315789 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1847352123 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.80952381 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.619047619 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192951002385 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767047263301 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112327395617 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142969929446 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737350961044 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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