A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The argument here which has the conclusion that dental care is not as beneficial as it is deemed to be needs to get answered on few question based on its assumption. On the basis of the assumption, it may be helpful to know if the argument has a practical or not.
The first question which arises is that the what were the age group of the people who were considered for the poll in United States. According to the passage it states that it considered adults of suburbs of United States to compare with the children living in Himalayan regions of Nepal. It is a well known fact that the teeth gets weaker as humans grow so it may be one of the reasons why the Nepalese children have such a strong teeth compared to the people of US.
The second reason why the conclusion is too ambitious because it causes the questions " What are the environmental conditions of both areas? Are they similar? or whether they are different? If the answer is that the conditions are different than it may be reason why the people have to visit their dentist regularly. It may even have to not do anything with the dentist.
Another question which needs to get answered before conclusion is "What are the daily food items which are eaten by the people are comparable and moreover do they have any effects on people's teeth?" If the answer is yes to the question above that that may be the reason why people living in the suburbs in United States have the problem.
Another question which needs to get answered is whether the daily routine of people of both the countries is similar or not? Moreover do the people living in US use better toothpaste to clean their teeth or not? if the answer to this question is NO, than that may be the reason why people in US see dentist more often.
Another possibility which the conclusion does not accounts for is the fact that people residing in US may be more concerned for their teeth than the people living in Nepal. That may be reason that they visit their dentist regularly.
The questions above are the ones which are needed to get answered before getting jumped to any conclusion because even if any single one of them has different answer, than that might be the reason why people visit their local dentist in US more than people who live in Nepal.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 1831 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.423 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.468 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.653 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'few questions'.
Suggestion: few questions
...s deemed to be needs to get answered on few question based on its assumption. On the basis o...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tooth'?
Suggestion: tooth
...he Nepalese children have such a strong teeth compared to the people of US. The...
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Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...itions of both areas? Are they similar? or whether they are different? If the answ...
^^
Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...er is that the conditions are different than it may be reason why the people have to...
^^^^
Line 13, column 253, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...the answer is yes to the question above that that may be the reason why people living in ...
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Line 15, column 126, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...f both the countries is similar or not? Moreover do the people living in US use better t...
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Line 15, column 213, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...toothpaste to clean their teeth or not? if the answer to this question is NO, than...
^^
Line 15, column 251, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...? if the answer to this question is NO, than that may be the reason why people in US...
^^^^
Line 19, column 51, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'account'
Suggestion: account
...ssibility which the conclusion does not accounts for is the fact that people residing in...
^^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...ingle one of them has different answer, than that might be the reason why people vis...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58313253012 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38051557558 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375903614458 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.972719572 57.8364921388 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.882352941 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4117647059 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47058823529 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165954732516 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059828158514 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671449580109 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953814113343 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653444505455 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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