Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
Today, there are many in the world living in abject poverty. Fortunately, there are quite a few generous people who cooperate with charities in contributing to the poor. While some hold that it is better to help the poor with the provision of foods and medical care, others believe that, above all, they need money to establish their own business. A question that arises is which contribution is more efficient and beneficial to them. If I had the opportunity to help the needy through charities, I would contribute money to them to launch their own small business for several reasons, two of which are as follows.
To begin with, giving money to the poor to help them with establishing a small business not only can be a long-term solution but also can make them both self-sufficient and independent. The provision of foods and medical care, however, leads them to be dependent on others because they always expect charities to help them. In this case, as their vital sustenance depends on charities, it cannot be an efficient solution, but a short-term one because if they lose the help of those humanitarian organizations, they could not survive. Money, on the other hand, helps them with having their own jobs. For example, if charities give them enough money to loan a small piece of land, not only would they be self-supporting in the production of food rather than only food consumers, but they could also afford the cost of the medical care. Therefore, it is imperative to help the poor with contributing money to be able to have a job, being beneficial to them in the long run.
Second, the poor can have strong desires to live a better life, thanks to having a proper job. It goes without saying that most poor children who live in poverty-stricken areas do not have the opportunity to attend schools or universities due to their high costs. Therefore, most of them not have any educational degree, which is pivotal to their future carrier. Obviously, by providing food and medical care, they get used to living on a subsistence level without any aspirations to live a more satisfying life. Consequently, their future generations would be as poor and illiterate as they are. Nevertheless, owing to their parents’ business, they would be more likely to attend the university, and as a result, their next generation would be more liable to be successful in the future.
To sum up, when it comes to contributing to the poor, I hold that it is more advantageous to give them money in order to launch their own small business as opposed to the contribution of foods or medical care. By doing so, not only can day become self-sufficient, but it also helps their next generations to live an educated, successful life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, for example, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84434968017 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88786272833 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456289978678 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5578904386 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.578947368 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6842105263 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149071656822 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534464385131 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371405258009 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10088850624 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443880068767 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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