Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? These days, children spend more time on doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sports. However, they should be given more time to do whatever they want.
In today’s progressive world, being successful in different areas is the major ambition which all parents have for their children. People try to plan the best daily schedule for their children in order to make them thrived in their lives. Some people think children should allocate all their time to some positive activities such as school work and sports. On the other hand, others hold an opposite view, believing that children should be given more time to do whatever they tend to. I, personally, concur with the latter group for some reasons on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, although the school activities and playing a regular sport are essential elements in children’s lives, the crucial role of leisure time in protect the mental health of children should not be underestimated. Nowadays, parents want to manage the time of children as they do positive activities all the time and not to waste time at all. They assign their children in different classes and do not allow them to spend their time as they enjoy. Parents, focusing on the best educational methods and more advantageous courses, overlook the emotional requirement of children. Children at school are overwhelmed and inundated with a lot of tasks and duties, and this situation imposes them an enormous pressure. In this vein, they need to have leisure time to relieve their stress and tension and stay productive. Having more time to do favorite activities can children have quality time at home, and as a result, perform better in school or other activities.
Second, the most blissful people are the ones who like the activities they do. When parents believe that children should only do school tasks and do exercise, they deprive their children of the chances of finding their interests and also unearthing their talents. They gradually convert their children to the robots which only do everything is dictated to them. Therefore, children do not have an opportunity to be innovative and creative in their lives. An example can derive this notion home. One of my friends, despite her great successes at work and several medals of swimming contests, is not satisfied with her life. She says that her childhood was spent on hardworking; she never has time to think about what she wanted. Had her parents allowed her to do what she wanted, she would have found her personal interest.
To sum it up, with taken two mentioned reasons into account, I do believe that children have to be allowed to spend more time on whatever they want. In this way, not only they stay productive and fresh but also it is highly probable that they find their interests and talents.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, so, therefore, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9645232816 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55382709511 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492239467849 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7386056511 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.772727273 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400352429453 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132156867095 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101410166081 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281874401334 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713116326056 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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