Today it is clear that our increasing use of technology has caused more harm than good for mankind.
With the advent of communication networks, the world has come closer to each other. Today, one can easily communicate with a friend or a family member who stays on another continent almost free of cost, a facility which was rare and expensive just decades ago. With applications like Skype, Google Meet or Zoom, professional meetings and conferences with colleagues based in different parts of the world, can be conducted with ease. In an international crisis like the COVID-19 pandemic, the entire world is working remotely from the safety of their home due to these advancements in networks and the internet. This ability to constantly stay in touch with co-workers, friends and family is a definately a positive effect of technology.
Travel, or commuting from one place to another, is a cruial part of our lives. Ever since the invention of the wheel, humans are constantly trying to improve the ways in which we travel. Journeys that took days are now completed within ours. Almost every major city in the entire world has an airport. Small towns and villages, even in developing countries are accessible with roads and rails. The ever-increasing curiosity to discover the world beyond planet earth, has taken humans to the moon and beyond. Even a developing nation like India, with the aid of technology and some brilliant minds has successfully completed space missions to Mars. None of this would have been possible without technology.
Although technology has made our lives easier, there are cases where we have become over-dependent on gadgets. Today, infants and toddlers won't eat anything without a phone in their hands; Just a decade ago, mothers were seen narrating stories to their children while feeding them. With easy access to internet, cases of teenagers getting addicted to explicit content and cyber bullying are on the rise. The need to constantly stay online, which these kids are learning from their parents, is detrimental to their growth. The general communication and bond that people used to share with their immediate family members and neighbours has taken a hit. However, all the awareness regarding these problems is also increasing now, and none of these ill-effects is strong enough to overshadow the advantages of technology.
Keeping in mind all these advantages and disadvantages mentioned hitherto, it can be seen that although technological advancements have had detrimental effects on human life as we know, the advantages and benefits that we are reaping cannot be neglected. Thus, by conciously keeping track of the way we use technology, we can easily take full advantage of it without causing too much harm to ourselves or to the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, regarding, so, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20642201835 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82437342825 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582568807339 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5181780928 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.095238095 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0815939594284 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215885522229 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0275512905223 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0497757257623 0.150359130593 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241844148615 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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