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educating children today is harder because of technology

Whether technology has had a positive or negative effect on children's education today, depends on the lens through which one is looking. Some may argue that the only path to educate and discipline children passes through academia, while others could believe that anything contributing to ehancing a child's creativity is called education. All that said, I disagree with the statement that educating children today is more challenging due to presence of cell phones, online games, and social media. I will demonstrate my ideas as follows.

Firstly, technology and all its dependants today, have led to a great increase of avalibility of knowledge. Nowadays, everything can be taught and learned through the internet. Every pupil can access useful information on their courses online, contact their peers in the blink of an eye from all around the world, disscuss problems and solutions, obtain the refrences required for their lessons and so on. Imagine a student who is assigned to research the topic of Photosynthesis in plants. Instead of spending a lot of time going to the library and stufying numerous books to get the necessary information, today, they can just search online and access innumerable refrences with adequate explanations and visual aids as well. Another example of the benefits of technology can be games and applications specially developed to teach young children alphabet or basics of a foreign language.

Secondly, I believe that despite what some people assume, children are averagely smarter today. The development of a wide range of online video games, different applications, social media and other forms of technology, has contributed to a boost in children's creativity and problem solving skills. Also, Children today mature in younger ages. In a competitive environment of games and social media, they are required to be fast and smart to feel equal with their peers. Collectively, these conditions can improve a child's performance in school. On the other hand, success in today's world depends to a great extent on an individual's relationship with technology and internet whatever their profession might be. So, what in more beneficial than developing this relationship in younger age?

In conclusion, altough technology may appear as a distraction to children's education today, I believe it plays an essential role in enhancing their capabilities and better education. Technology has made access to information easier, and it has contributed to the increase of children's mental capacity and creativity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... through which one is looking. Some may argue that the only path to educate and disci...
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Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...s world depends to a great extent on an individuals relationship with technology and intern...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4080604534 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97822700838 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581863979849 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7974597601 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292718733986 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912193400516 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885808741128 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206631443544 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077272628544 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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