Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples to supp | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Over the last few years, social networks have risen in popularity due to dramatic progress in Internet and changes in people's lifestyles. It goes without saying that they are an inseparable part of daily life and a wide range of people use them in many spheres of life. Due to their important characteristic, there is a long-standing discussion among people about whether publishing personal experiences on social networks to keep records is a good option or not. Some people prefer to publish that information by uploading pictures and information, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I, myself, like to keep records of my experiences on social networks. I will elaborate on this issue in the following paragraphs.
To commence, personal records can be uploaded on social networks in order to share them with our friends. To illustrate this point one need only refer to the number of friends that follow us and we follow them on the social-networking site such as Instagram and Facebook. Needless to say that all those people want to know the situation of their followings, whether they are happy or sad, where they are, how is their job, what they like and so on. Therefore, these kinds of tools facilitate sharing information. For instance, imagine that you are in Havana and you do not like that your friends call you, but they want to know where you are. It is clear that by uploading a picture you can tell all of them that you are in Cuba in the mean time. As you can see, using this wide spread networks make everything fast to and efficient.
Furthermore, one should not forget that the experiences can help others to make a better decisions considering. One tool that helps to publish an experience is a social network. Take, for example, traveling always accompanies with new experiences, and many people travel to new places. They can just post good or bad times in the place that they have visited and other people can make benefit from them in traveling. As a personal experience, I recall that when I wanted to visit Italy, I did not know which city should I visit because my time was really tight. I started to review many websites and I found that people presented their opinion with nice pictures about any city in Italy. Finally, I went to Rome where is an amazing city just like the pictures that I saw before the trip. This personal experience taught me to use social networks for traveling. More over, uploading experiences help us to improve ourselves based on feedback that we receive from others. It can help us to compensate for the shortages that we have in our life.

Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I prefer to publish my experience on social networks. It helps to be in contact with others in the meantime and also is helpful for others to use our experiences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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...y that all those people want to know the situation of their followings, whether t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76070038911 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69295911532 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492217898833 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3977174405 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.88 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.56 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333554911208 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853159524428 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593776671505 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209108897848 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634320253725 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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