College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Every year, a wave of frantic high school seniors get accepted into college. The panic and anticipation of college admission suddenly transforms into what field should I study? As the aphorism goes: "Chase your passions and the money will come." Life is short and it is crucial that we live it with zeal and fervor. To dedicate your college career based on the current job pool is to concede to mediocrity.
College is a huge commitment, both financially and personally. Many students create huge financial burdens in the form of debt in order to fund their collegiate aspirations. Dedicating all these resources into a field of study for the sake of job safety is wasteful. The career market is dynamic and everchanging. For instance, Bill Gates had been interested in computers when he was a young child in Seattle. At the time, computers were scarce, and the need for computer engineers was just as fickle. Nonetheless, he devoted his life into mastering his burning passion inside and out of the classroom. He would eventually found Microsoft. Today, the demand for computer engineers is four times higher than the supply. The needs of tomorrow are unknown; it is imperative that we encourage college students to study what interests them, and teach them to invest in themselves.
Further, human nature has taught us not to settle for less. In sports, school and in our personal lives, we aim to excel. If students are to excel in the classroom, they must be genuinely interested in the subject they are learning. Mark Cuban, the eccentric billionaire owner of the Dallas Mavericks, began college as an accounting major. Disinterested, his grades suffered. Eventually, he would shift his focus towards entrepreneurship. Conversely, students may thrive studying subjects that they are mildly interested in, but the synergies of hard work and passion can create immeasurable success. Nobody wants to be average. It is imperative that students study subjects that they will devote time and effort to mastering.
Finally, this is not all encompassing. An abundance of students enroll in universities for job security; that is perfectly fine. Job assurances are an invaluable asset that not every major can guarantee to prospective employees. On the other hand, the future is unknown. Who is to say that they know what jobs will be in demand in the next decade? To illustrate, take the traditional cab driver: once a profitable industry attainable by people of classes, they are struggling to take stay afloat. The ride sharing technology company, Uber, disrupted the entire field. The luxury is job security is something that particular students may be looking for, but there is no such thing as job certainty.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, if, look, may, nonetheless, so, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12107623318 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87873167569 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591928251121 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9025446998 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.6774193548 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3870967742 23.4991977007 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.87096774194 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156558129879 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352992631578 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407306213563 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967759372576 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298147071894 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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