In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

A glance at the extended life span that started from late 20 centry brings a light questions that several times provokes discussions, that is, whether what causes made people's life longer. Some people might contend that the technical progress in the field of medical science and the increase efficiency in food production is the main cause for the loger life span. I also agree with these perspective, specially in terms of medications development and extinction of starvation. In the ensuing paragraphs, I will try to shed some lights on this point of view with amples exaples and conspicuouis reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned firstly is that medication thesedays is equally eccessible to all people, specillay those who live in a countriy that finished their develptmental stage. My personal experience with my granmother will provide good example. She spent last 5 years of her life on the bed of hospital, constantly treating the decease and injecting medicines. Though it was not a quality time for me and my family to take care of a person that lost one's autonomy, it was precious enough that abled us to prepare for saying goodbye to our loving granmother. And I think this kind of demand for artificial extention for life is increasing because everyone want their signigicant others not to leave them abruptly.
Another point to be mentioned is that the actual starvation rate thesedays is pretty low, except for a few countries where they have difficulty with the economy. According to the historical report, people in the past easily died in young age due the lack of proper nuitritions and food intake. However, now we all know that US is throwing out around 2 billions of edible food each year. Their techniques for food productions are way efficient that they have too much abundance, and obviously less people suffering from starvation contributed to the longer life span in the western countries.
Although the foregoing points cross the mind at a first sight, it does not mean that they are the only one. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. It should be noted that the lessend physical labour clearly advanced the lifespan. For example, our ancestors had to work hard outside in farm or inside the factory to to earn the food and money, which made them exhaused and sick as they got old. Nevertheless, most of people thesedayas are dedicated to sevice job or a office job, which requires fewer physical lobour.
Due to the above mentioned ground, people' life span is getting loger, and medication and higher food production are two prime and momentous reasons.

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Average: 9.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this perspective' or 'these perspectives'?
Suggestion: this perspective; these perspectives
... the loger life span. I also agree with these perspective, specially in terms of medications deve...
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Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '2 billion'.
Suggestion: 2 billion
...all know that US is throwing out around 2 billions of edible food each year. Their techniques...
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Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... have too much abundance, and obviously less people suffering from starvation contri...
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Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...d outside in farm or inside the factory to to earn the food and money, which made the...
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Line 4, column 438, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...and sick as they got old. Nevertheless, most of people thesedayas are dedicated to sevice job ...
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Line 4, column 495, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...esedayas are dedicated to sevice job or a office job, which requires fewer physic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, so, except for, for example, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95691609977 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66638899012 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609977324263 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9062401557 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.052631579 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0859817655849 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0241520188074 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237273418222 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0464522206239 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324617181976 0.0645574589148 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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