Do you agree or disagree?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Even though many psychologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that today with modern technologies, human being are going to have an easy life and enjoyable situations, I firmly recommend that by progressing and changing of world, people have new problems and busy thought and also less communication and no time for to be cheerful life. And believe it or not, in the future most of the societies and communities will have depress and disappointment people by modify of world. I will elaborate my idea with significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that as the word in changing in short time with developing new devices and tools, people are facing with novel problems and questions in their life. As a matter of fact, modern technologies enhancing the new machines in the markets which some people don’t know who they working or application in some officials or education centers, but they buy and prepare them without having efficient abilities. This makes people to be so busy and spend more time on solving the problems and less time for happiness. Nowadays, not only people are not satisfy of their new circumstances and complex world, but they also have many difficult problems. For instance, my friend is a modernized person in every new materials that often she is busy and dissatisfy of her life.
Another my remarkable reason is that there is no doubt that today’s world completely poses with variety tools in their life and less communication with each other from that of past. This situation makes them be alone and more sad. As example can illustrate this claim, since I have bought my innovative cell phone and Laptop, I don’t have enough time for mountain claiming, meeting my best friends and relative families and go to cinema and etc. that I had really enjoyable and happy time previously. Actually, I like go back that time and have a perfect easy life.
As a result, one the basic of points mentioned above, I strongly agree with this statement that by modifying world and new techniques people are not gratify of their life and they are more depress and disappointed, because they don’t spend enough time for amusements and pleasure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: depressed
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Suggestion: etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, really, so, for instance, in short, no doubt, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90414507772 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73731727241 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518134715026 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.6118976767 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.214285714 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213446350691 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076316721475 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634775800858 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140819810773 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342554112956 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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