At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus such as how many hours the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, and students are almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
Needless to say, students are suffering from some problems that their universities have. This brings up a highly controversial topic whether it is better to ask students to be involved in the campus issues in order to solve them or recruit experts. I believe that involving young adults in the decision-making process is advantageous. The reasons behind this standpoint are that adults have a better perspective and the university can save money, explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, students have a better perspective on topics surrounding the campus. In other words, students always use the library for studying or they go to the cafeteria in order to eat foods. Therefore, they can make good decisions about the campus in order to study better or eat delicious meals in the cafeteria. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When I was a university student, our university administrators asked the students to participate in the decision-making process regarding the improvement of food quality in the university cafeteria. Since most of the students had food there, each student suggested a good proposal for the aforementioned improvement. As a result of this, the university made a beneficial decision about food quality of the cafeteria. Not did our university's cafeteria serve a high-quality food but also students had good meals. Consequently, as you can see, students have better perspective concerning the college environmental helping the university makes a good decision.
The second point worth discussing is related to money costs. In fact, when the university hires experts for the sake of deciding about issues students encounter, the university should spend money to hire them. Hiring expert sometimes costs a lot of money depending on the issue and the time needed to solve that problem. One example will suffice to illustrate my point. My friends' university decides to resolve the problem regarding the library's building. Their university administrator did not consider asking students to involve in the problem. My friend quoted that the university president had not known how much it would cost for them to hire experts before they recruited them. However, when they contracted them, they paid up to several thousand dollars which were really a considerable amount of money. Nevertheless, if it was requested by university from the students to entail in the issue of the campus, their college president would not spend that money. Hence, the university can save a lot of money if students are involved in solving the issues concerning the campus.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that involvement of young adults in making decisions about the campus problems is beneficial because university not only will benefit from the perspective of students but also will save money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32087912088 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0382705661 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49010989011 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9230824113 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.875 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95833333333 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165068826881 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542029549839 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382811625558 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104801301729 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349199463635 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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