105. The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of Butler Manufacturing.
"During the past year, workers at Butler Manufacturing reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. A recent government study reports that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents. If we shorten each of our work shifts by one hour, we can improve Butler Manufacturing's safety record by ensuring that our employees are adequately rested."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumption. it perhaps assume cogent, at first glimpse, to concur with the argument in article that - fatigue and sleep deprivation is main reason of accident so to reduce the accident we should shorten time by one hour. However, in order to fully figure out this argument, we need to have a significant amount of additional evidence. The dispute could end up being much powerless then it looks or it perhaps be quite authenticate. In order to make that conviction, we need more than analyze what we learn.
first, the argument assumes that, accident can reduce by shorten the time period by one hour. Even so it is unwarranted because only one hour time may not be effective reason of accident. the hard level of work,number of helping worker while doing hard work may be reason of accident also.
another piece of evidence that would weaken the argument could come from the interview. we should ask the question to worker. how is your work? are you enjoying your work? are you feel uneasy to last hour of work? or we can ask the question to people who effected by the accident also. how this was happen? The clue can come from the answer of those questions.
one more important piece of evidence that might undermine argument is - making time of article. many years ago, companies have no material to doing work easily. and many people not had the knowledge about the safety material. the clue can from the research about availability of safety material. Butler manufacturing industries may have few safety material then Panoply industries. this may be the important cause of accident. argument never address about the working time hour of Pinoply industries.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound. Clearly, then we need to have an additional evidences in order to get a more complete and concrete understanding of the strength and weakness of article.
Ultimately, the argument might have been buttressed by survey, interview, change the study design, think about time frame and research about availability of safety material and the view or thinking of workers.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1745 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.834 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.507 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.461 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.377 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, while, even so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00277777778 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64459302865 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508333333333 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6017285003 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.2692307692 119.503703932 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.8461538462 23.324526521 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118737961966 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338453827367 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356707753609 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0543928597532 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323270112287 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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