"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
The argument is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores crucial assumption. it perhaps assume cogent, at first glimpse, to concur with the argument in article that problems lies with the publics lack of awareness, not with the quality of movies. however, in order to fully figure out this argument, we need to have a significant amount of additional evidence. The dispute could end up being much powerful then it looks or it perhaps be quite authenticate. in order to make that conviction, we need more than analyze what we learn.
First, the argument assume that problem lies with publics not with quality of movies. however it is unwarranted because, problems could lies on quality of movies or problem could lies with story of movies or problems could lies with actor of movies also.
Second the argument never addresses that, their are any other sources for watching super screen produced movies available or not. they may be watch on you tube or any other website. that can may be cause of fewer attended and increase in reviews.
One more important piece of evidence that might undermine argument is, only advertising may not be cause of increasing viewers. they should take interview with those people.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound. Clearly, then we need to have an additional evidences in order to get a more complete and concrete understanding of the strength and weakness of this article. we need to know more information. Ultimately, the argument might have been buttressed by interview, survey, time frame, study design.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 258 350
No. of Characters: 1265 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.817 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.433 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.433 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...g, since it ignores crucial assumption. it perhaps assume cogent, at first glimpse...
^^
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'assumes'?
Suggestion: assumes
... ignores crucial assumption. it perhaps assume cogent, at first glimpse, to concur wit...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...reness, not with the quality of movies. however, in order to fully figure out this argu...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ch powerful then it looks or it perhaps be quite authenticate. in order to make th...
^^
Line 1, column 469, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ks or it perhaps be quite authenticate. in order to make that conviction, we need ...
^^
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ith publics not with quality of movies. however it is unwarranted because, problems cou...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: however,
...ith publics not with quality of movies. however it is unwarranted because, problems cou...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lie'
Suggestion: lie
... is unwarranted because, problems could lies on quality of movies or problem could l...
^^^^
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lie'
Suggestion: lie
...s on quality of movies or problem could lies with story of movies or problems could ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lie'
Suggestion: lie
... with story of movies or problems could lies with actor of movies also. Second the ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...roblems could lies with actor of movies also. Second the argument never addresses t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...cond the argument never addresses that, their are any other sources for watching supe...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...creen produced movies available or not. they may be watch on you tube or any other w...
^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...watch on you tube or any other website. that can may be cause of fewer attended and ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...tube or any other website. that can may be cause of fewer attended and increase in revie...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...e argument is, only advertising may not be cause of increasing viewers. they should take...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...may not be cause of increasing viewers. they should take interview with those people...
^^^^
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'evidence'?
Suggestion: evidence
...rly, then we need to have an additional evidences in order to get a more complete and con...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... strength and weakness of this article. we need to know more information. Ultimate...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 258.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06201550388 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63235086519 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1704470674 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.625 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0793577468167 0.218282227539 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0257910203717 0.0743258471296 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519592093408 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0492126792174 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702013090804 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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