According to a new report from the federal government, overall donations of money to nonprofit groups increased last year. Most notably, donations to international aid groups increased by 30 percent, followed by donations to environmental groups, which increased by 23 percent. In contrast, donations to educational institutions did not fare so well, actually decreasing by 3 percent. All the major economic indicators suggest that consumer spending is higher than average this year. In particular, spending has risen considerably for luxury items, such as high-end automobiles, electronics, and fashion, showing that potential donors have ample disposable income. Therefore, the clearest explanation for the decline in donations to educational institutions is that people actually value education less than they did in the past.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The latest report by the federal government has noted a significant increase of donation in nonprofit, international aid, and environmental sectors. A decrease of 3 percent has been noticed in the educational sector. At the same time, there was a significant money expenditure on luxurious items. By considering above facts author concludes that decline in the donation for education purposes is due to people value education less than the previous year. But this conclusion has ignored many assumptions and filled with
errors. So we need to dig deeper for many unstated facts in order to reach an appropriate
conclusion.
Firstly, the educational sector donation has been decreased by 3 percent, which is not a very significant amount. There is a possibility that last year the donation was more than enough than required. So there has been a slight decrement in donation and this is enough for this year. Another explanation for this decrease might be that a significant amount of donation went to the nonprofit sector, which is a prime requirement for this year. So none of these explanation leads us to the point that people are devaluing the importance of education.
Another factor discussed by the author is that there has been a significant spending on luxury items like high-end automobiles, electronic gadgets, and fashionable items. So people are spending money on lifestyle, atheistic values which are signs of a progressive and developed society. People can spend money on these items if they have good knowledge of these things or if they consider the value of these things in modern society. These things are useful as per the changing demand of modern culture. So this means that society is becoming more educated and progressive.
Another reason for a decrement in education sector might be that other career-oriented sectors,
which create jobs after completing education are diminishing. So a lot of people are migrating to other states or countries in search of jobs. This leads to migrate their children to other states.
So the federal government has seen a sharp decline in children population. So if demand is less then
this decline in donation is a thoughtful step. Now the government can use this money in the career-oriented sectors which will help to pull their immigrant population to deport to their own country.
Finally, another unstated assumption is to find out the reason for why people are spending more money on luxurious items. There might be a significant demand for luxurious items in the international market. Developed countries are using more of these type of items in their daily life.
So it is better for any other country to understand the new demand by the international market. So it is important to start manufacturing these products. Eventually, this will bring a huge amount of foreign currency in the local market. But before starting this it is important to understand these products
and to understand this person should start using these products. So they can create significant feature
over these products.
So All the above-stated assumption leads us to conclude that decrease in the donation for the education
sector and expenditure on luxurious items doesn't mean that people are giving less importance to
education. There might be other reason, why expenditure has increased significantly in other sectors and an insignificant amount of decrement has been noticed in the educational sector.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 560 350
No. of Characters: 2838 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.865 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.897 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.144 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.531 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 96, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ildren population. So if demand is less then this decline in donation is a thoughtf...
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Line 20, column 43, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ctor and expenditure on luxurious items doesnt mean that people are giving less import...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2923.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 559.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.228980322 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95528594384 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4114490161 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 922.5 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0056684344 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.34375 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.46875 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.3125 5.70786347227 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 15.0 5.15768463074 291% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.20758483034 244% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144802952897 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044640751127 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068615248145 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0474725010883 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655594381012 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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