According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise. However, Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced a system in which teachers closely monitored students; under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. In the first year the honor code was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey, a majority of Groveton students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. Thus, all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The writer concludes that all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students. To support his conclusion, he has cited various evidences such as the student's reference and the statistics of the cases. Although these evidences appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. In order to make the argument more sound, the author needs to cite the following especific evidences.
First of all, the writer presents that in the first year in which honor code placed, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating, five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen, this contains apocryphal. If so, who were conducting the resesarch? If this is just based on the teacher's personal experienced then the argument made by the author go unwarranted. Without mentioning the authenticity of the research that had conducted, this might not be persuasive. One the other hand, even if it was reliable research, there are still fourteen cases, just sixteen cases has reduced, that is little bit more than half. It is possible that, there might be another efficient method to redude the number of cheating cases. If either of these cases are true, the writer's assertion of all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students somhow become unwarranted.
Second of all, the writer claims a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise, however he has not mentioned the statistics and source of the research organization. Perhaps, it might be just the author's speculation rather than derived from the research. Additionally, it is possible that even if the cheating among colleges and university is on the rise, there may be certain institutions, this case might not hold for all. If either case was true, then the author's recommendation becomes unpersuasive. If there were certain college and university in which the rare cases of cheating occurs, recomending the conclusion to all the college and universities might not be persuasive.
Third of all, it is potentially true that students may have not reported the cheating of their friends in order to be harrassed later. It is also probable that students have made a collision to cheat in partnership, and the cases come out only when there accurs discord among students. The author has not focusing in this possiblities, if either of this cases were true, the writer's recommedation becomes unwarranted.
In sum, the writer's recommendation that all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students potentially true. However, without the specific evidences such as the reliability of research and data, students prospects. The writer couldn't convince me in his assertion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2368 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.17 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.806 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.59 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... so, who were conducting the resesarch? If this is just based on the teachers pers...
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Line 4, column 597, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...just sixteen cases has reduced, that is little bit more than half. It is possible that, th...
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Line 4, column 764, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... If either of these cases are true, the writers assertion of all colleges and universit...
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Line 6, column 229, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nization. Perhaps, it might be just the authors speculation rather than derived from th...
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Line 6, column 492, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... all. If either case was true, then the authors recommendation becomes unpersuasive. If...
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Line 6, column 594, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tain college and university in which the rare cases of cheating occurs, recomendi...
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Line 8, column 350, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...sing in this possiblities, if either of this cases were true, the writers recommedat...
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Line 10, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ion becomes unwarranted. In sum, the writers recommendation that all colleges and un...
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Line 10, column 297, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...nd data, students prospects. The writer couldnt convince me in his assertion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, third, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31728665208 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87588128758 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44420131291 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8301838103 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.454545455 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347356906193 0.218282227539 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1074376635 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121951952421 0.0701772020484 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225735374609 0.128457276422 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513566616417 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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