Arctic deer live on islands in Canada’s arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The article claims that recent global warming results in the decline of the arctic deer populations on islands in Canada’s arctic regions, only based on both the melting of sea ice owing to the warm climate and the local hunters’ statements. Obviously, the assertion lacks of scientific evidences.
To begin with, it may be a mistake to understand that the reports on the decline of the deer populations coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt. Maybe, the deer populations declined many years ago, while the global warming has just happened in recent years. It needs to be ascertained by the authorities whether both phenomena happened concurrently. In addition, though these things occur at the same time, it doesn’t explain that the global warming leads to the falling deer populations. There may be various reasons to bring about the phenomenon that the deer populations are declining. For example, the overdue hunting in the deer habitat results in the decrease of deer populations and maybe this is where the rub is.
Another question is that the global warming causes the sea ice over which the deer travel to melt, but is beneficial for the plants on which deer feed to grow. It indicates that there will be more plants for the deer to sustain. Though the deer can’t look for their food on other islands separating by the sea, there may be adequate plants around their habitat for them to survive. Furthermore, the global warming causes the melting of the sea ice, but, in some of the year, the islands in Canada’s arctic regions, where the arctic deer live on, are cold enough for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Therefore, the deer can travel longer distance to hunt for food during the period of sea ice. More information is needed to confirm whether the declining deer populations are subject to the deficiency of food.
In addition, one mustn’t forget the report from the local hunters who say that the deer populations are declining. Are their reports believable? As is known, the hunters make their livings by hunting. Most probably, the deer suffer from their undue hunting and become less and less. On the other hand, the downward trend of the deer populations should be confirmed by wildlife biologists, who come to the conclusion by investigating the deer habitat in Canada’s arctic regions. Another possibility is that the hunters indeed give the fact that the deer is declining, but the reasons may be the fatal decease that happened to the deer, or human beings develop the areas on where arctic deer live in order to tap certain kind of natural resources.
To sum up, the conclusion given in the article is weak. To ascertain the decline of arctic deer populations, the writer needs to provide more evidences of which are from either the investigation into the areas where the arctic deer live on by the wildlife biologists, or the true effects of the global warming on the deer habitat.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE
Message: Simply use 'some'.
...ses the melting of the sea ice, but, in some of the year, the islands in Canada's arct...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, kind of, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92412451362 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66053766902 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433852140078 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2198682495 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.045454545 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350810016689 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103867352535 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899214748335 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212319174725 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963215590514 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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