Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
This paper is describing assumptions of deer hunters in arctic about their reduction in population-based on their assumption with various reasons explained in the statement. The main reason is cited as deer are unable to follow their age-old migration pattern, the ice covering the sea which separates the island, and their habitat in the warm area due to paucity of vegetation. However, these statements are weak to bolster the extrapolation and dearth of evidence which doesn't make an assumption right.
Firstly, arctic deer are habitable to live in the snowy places so they are well familiar with the environment on arctic as well as they are used to forage. Moreover, the author is not stating that if deer are carnivorous or herbivorous or maybe they have acclimatized themselves to hinge on seafood as there is paucity vegetation. Deer might travel to the mainland when ice covers sea for forage and thus latter they might unable to return as snow getting melt. For example, migratory birds are losing their paths because of drastic deforestation and change in soil types of land.
Secondly, there is a lack of statistical data and evidence in the report as the number of deer or their depletion rate is not given hence it is impossible to render the assumption. Because of global warming sea ice is surely melting and there are a lot of topographic changes are happening globally but that does not directly affect the habitat of deer as they are in their microclimate. It is similar to heavy rainfall affecting the caterpillar in its cocoon.
In addition to it, depletion of deer is maybe because of the forage of carnivorous animals in and around like polar bears or any other animal. The depletion rate of the year of the report might be highest compare to other years as there is no such data is given.
In totality, it is unfair to prejudice the depletion rate of deer because of just global warming and forage problems there might be myriads reasons behind it. It will clear only after the relevant evidence, proofs, and statistical data to cite the position on the above assumption.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1709 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.648 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.328 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rapolation and dearth of evidence which doesnt make an assumption right. Firstly, ar...
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Line 2, column 141, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to foraging'.
Suggestion: used to foraging
...vironment on arctic as well as they are used to forage. Moreover, the author is not stating th...
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Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the highest'.
Suggestion: be the highest
...on rate of the year of the report might be highest compare to other years as there is no s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86592178771 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71311743402 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511173184358 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9100349797 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.428571429 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219279550458 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663132387141 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597556297874 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105094373563 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650029652632 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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