The council of Maple County, concerned about the county's becoming overdeveloped, is debating a proposed measure that would prevent the development of existing farmland in the county. But the council is also concerned that such a restriction, by limiting the supply of new housing, could lead to significant increases in the price of housing in the county. Proponents of the measure note that Chestnut County established a similar measure ten years ago, and its housing prices have increased only modestly since. However, opponents of the measure note that Pine County adopted restrictions on the development of new residential housing fifteen years ago, and its housing prices have since more than doubled. The council currently predicts that the proposed measure, if passed, will result in a significant increase in housing prices in Maple County.
This is the proposal for Maple county to circumscribe the apotheosis in the area which may result in the augmentation of housing prices. At first glance the argument might seem valid but, due to lack of evidence and proofs, the argument may fall apart. This argument consists of supporting examples that are ten and fifteen years ago which is not strongly bolstered by supporting evidence with proofs like community survey, case papers, and statistical data which may be conducive to prejudice the argument by exegesis of supporting papers and case studies.
Firstly, Maple county is concerned about over development of the county which is pragmatic and should concern as if the all open land gets converted into housing, skyscraper and eventually a metropolis then it will be detrimental for people residing in the county and their health. on contrary, the council is also worried about a paucity of new housing which will lead to an escalation in the price of housing. But the county should first surveyed the human development index in the county which will show that what amount of people required basic facilities like housing which will eventually limit the new construction of housing and may be helpful to save open farmland. Overdevelopment does not mean just construction of infrastructure but also overpopulation which might be mitigated through sustainable solutions to build the county.
Secondly, the author is citing the example of the chestnut county to support the argument for restricting the over development. But the case is ten years old and does not hold valid supporting elements to buttress today’s condition. Ten years ago the housing prices are might be less with higher human development index hence, in the Chestnut county people might not require new housing. Also, the migration rate in the county was maybe limited which affect the housing prices modestly.
Moreover, another example cited by the author is of the Pine county which is elder than the chestnut county that is fifteen years. But in contrast with chestnut county condition in pine county might be different with low human development index and the number of people migrated in the county may be more to accommodate more housing which might result in a higher cost.
However, implying the same policy in the maple county might not work unless some important base study like human development index, migration status, location of county, and survey of people in the county has done. So the author should provide parameters of the case study with statistical data of people residing in the county.
In totality, apotheosis or overdevelopment can be viable with a sustainable and planned policy which need clairvoyance to imagine further consequences. Hence, the author required to provide a survey report, case study details, location of county, political status at every county at that time to prejudice the argument without which this is merely a conjecture to infer.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2438 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.069 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.689 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.011 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.938 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.413 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...esiding in the county and their health. on contrary, the council is also worried a...
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Line 6, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h this is merely a conjecture to infer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2487.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 481.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17047817048 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74608867687 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442827442827 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.1386366076 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.294117647 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2941176471 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256530979599 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938658432261 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076659355811 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139143281742 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767409103438 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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