Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Global warming is one of the major concerns of the modern world. Scientists all over the world scrutinize this problem trying to understand how it is related to human activities and how it could be mitigated. A wide variety of animal species could suffer from the consequences of such an increase in the planet's temperatures, due to the interference of this advent in the animals' milieu. Because of that, the deduction made in the statement sounds plausible, at a first glance. However, there are some points to be discussed in order to corroborate the final conclusion.
First of all, the argument that deers in the arctic are being wiped out because the temperatures in the planet are raising could be strengthened if the author mentioned that the deers supplies are meager in the regions they live, for that reason they have to hop from their current islands to others - disconnected from the formers because of ice melting - where food is more abundant. Saying nothing about this matter, even if the ice melting is hindering deers to go to different pieces of land, we cannot assert that they are starving where they are living currently.
Second, it is said in the text that local hunters are reporting the deers missing, thereby we can infer that these animals are subject to hunter activities. Perhaps deers population is decreasing because of the exacerbation of that practice. To strengthen the authors's conclusion, the letter should present data regarding the maintenance or reduction of hunting rates along the years; once this practice, if honed, could affect directly the deers disappearance.
Last of all, another possible option is that global warming is indeed affecting deers populational figures. Conversely, due to the non adaptation of the plants to the climate change instead of ice melting effects. Maybe the plants are not being able to survive in warmer temperatures, which would cause their deaths and consequently the deers' as well. So, the authors should complement their assumption with data that buttress the preservation of plant species in the deers habitat.
In conclusion, the author raises a reasonable conclusion about the effects of global warming in deer population in the arctic. Nonetheless, there are some lack of evidence in the text regarding resources and hunting figures that need to be filled to make such deduction robust, as there are alternative explanations which can be inferred from the information provided.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2017 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.042 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.724 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.99 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... the interference of this advent in the animals milieu. Because of that, the deduction ...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...e subject to hunter activities. Perhaps deers population is decreasing because of the...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...ce, if honed, could affect directly the deers disappearance. Last of all, another ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 469, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...he preservation of plant species in the deers habitat. In conclusion, the author r...
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Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...theless, there are some lack of evidence in the text regarding resources and hunt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, so, then, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.175 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81484342044 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.7406091568 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.375 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201519891443 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552128371755 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562781223629 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102398891776 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781920447925 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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