Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument about the cause of decline in the deer population is due to the global warming seems unjustful. The argument lacks proper evidences to coroborrate the satement of positions what the author has stated. There is no inter relation between the facts stated in the former part of the argument to the later one. Several assumptions are made which lacks proper proofs which makes unconvincing. Without having clear records, the conclusions are made. This makes the argument weak and difficult to accept.
First of all the argument claims that the local reporters have claimed that there is a decline in the deer population. The argument is not supplying the proper statistics on the number of deer that are present in that locale and a comparison survey that evinces that there is a depletion in the deer population. Without these facts, co-relating this report as the co-incidence with the global warming looks inept.
Secondly, the argument is stating that there is a global warming, which is accepted and due to this the ice sheets are melting. But the argument do not accurately state that the ice sheets are melting in the Arctic regions, which is hindering the itenerancy of the deer. Even though the ice glaciers are melting away, it may need not be same at all the places. Hence this fact neither be considered as potential cause for the deer population depletion.
Further, the argument states that decline in the deer population has resulted in the unfollow of their age-old migration across the frozen sea. Without proper evidence on this fact it becomes unlikely to accept that there is a decline in the deer population. It may be likely that since certain years, the temperatures are unstable, the necessary plants which the deer use to ingest have not grown and due to this the deer have died lacking proper nutrition. Since no proper evidence is provided the statement of conclusion cannot be accepted.
Thus, there are several key factors that are missing, makes the argument unconvincing. Still deeper study and surveys has to be made before stating the conclusion. In total the argument is full of loop holes and cannot be accepted.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point. Here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/1arctic-deer-live-…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1759 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.143 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...may need not be same at all the places. Hence this fact neither be considered as pote...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 370, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...le, the necessary plants which the deer use to ingest have not grown and due to thi...
^^^
Line 7, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eer have died lacking proper nutrition. Since no proper evidence is provided the stat...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ssing, makes the argument unconvincing. Still deeper study and surveys has to be made...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97520661157 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57733190938 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462809917355 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2704520485 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0861094490625 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285994524458 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334639917636 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509252302282 0.128457276422 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391761380085 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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