Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument concludes that the reason for the decrease in deer populations is the result of the deer being unable to stick to their age-old migration patterns across the frozen areas.This conclusion seems to be weak as there are many unanswered questions and assumptions that are taken on the basis of a report whose integrity is questionable.
Firstly,the argument states that their habitat is limited to warm area where there are plants on which they feed and cold enough for some part of the year where they could move across the frozen sea.But on what basis can we be assured that for how much part of the year the deer leaves their warm habitat and move to the cold one.It might be possible that deer doe not leave their warm habitat throughout their lifetime because in warm areas they are able to satiate their need for food by feeding on the plants available there.
Secondly,the argument relies on the reports obtained from local hunters who state that deer population are declining.But what was the sample size of the report that was taken into consideration.How many local hunters opinion was included in the report?And if the sample size was large there is still a possibility that some faction of deer's population might have migrated to some other place where the hunters might not have been able to search for,so the integrity of the report mentioned in the argument is contentious and might not provide a basis for any conclusion.
Thirdly,it is stated in the argument that as the reports provided by local hunters coincide with recent trends of global warming deer are dying because they fail to follow their age old tradition of migrating across the frozen sea which has started melting due to the effects of global warming.But there is a possibility that due to some reasons the plants on which the deer are dependent have been decreased and so unable to find food,deer's population has declined.Also there is a possibility that the reproduction rate of the deer might have reduced and it becomes a crucial factor that has to be considered while considering a decline in population.
To sum up the argument's conclusion which is based on a questionable report becomes quite weak due to the above mentioned unanswered questions.If the report's integrity is proved somehow and if the report includes all the assumptions taken in the argument then only the argument's conclusion becomes indefensible.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 1989 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.736 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 52.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 33.35 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.743 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ons taken in the argument then only the arguments conclusion becomes indefensible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97290640394 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72608474071 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.332913517 57.8364921388 229% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 403.8 119.503703932 338% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.2 23.324526521 348% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.0 5.70786347227 368% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198584535723 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110867865246 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119313435571 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110867865246 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119313435571 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.6 14.3799401198 296% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.74 48.3550499002 -22% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 12.197005988 286% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.73 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.08 8.32208582834 133% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 35.0 11.9071856287 294% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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