Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The author of the argument claim that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. To support his claim, he had reference to the reports from local hunters about the declining in deer populations.
To determine the validity of the argument, we must understand the real reason behind it the decline in the population of deer. We must also know whether the decline in population is the search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. To understand the effectiveness of the recommendation, it would be important to analyze whether the evidence provided by the author is flawed or flawless.
The author claimed that the deers have to move over the ice from island to island in search of food and due to global warming, the ice is melting and they are able to follow their old- age migration patterns across the frozen sea is not entirely convincing, since it lacks in the crucial information and evidence in support of his claim.
First, the deer are known for their easily adaptive quality, so they can change their place and can live some other part in case of weather and environmental change and he didn't provide any sound reasoning about how the global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt and the declining in the deer’s population.
Secondly, there may be many other reasons why the deer population is declining, for example, hunting cloud be the reason for the decline of deer population or many the plant on which they depend for their food got extinct from their place or they are not able to reach the places where they can find the food. So, there may be many reasons for the decline in the population of the deer.
Thirdly, his reference to the local hunter report also made his claim weak as these reports are not from the government or UN office or any reliable private firm. If he took reference from any government or any other reliable Magzine or firm then this will make his claim stronger.
Finally, to sum up, the author based his assumption on inaccurate information. Therefore the assumption that global warming is the main reason in the deer’s population declining rate is not sound and illogically convincing. It has many flaws and lacks crucial evidence to prove the assumption
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 1914 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.646 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.451 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.426 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.751 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...y moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. To understand the effectivene...
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Line 9, column 39, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The author claimed that the deers have to move over the ice from island to isla...
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Line 13, column 173, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...weather and environmental change and he didnt provide any sound reasoning about how t...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... how the global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt and the decli...
^^
Line 27, column 80, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s assumption on inaccurate information. Therefore the assumption that global warming is t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84184914842 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55055153536 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447688564477 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4790993422 57.8364921388 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.142857143 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3571428571 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.70786347227 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247194483892 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845247559335 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107156396177 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122623994278 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836274262286 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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