Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
A super screen movie has the power to give a cinematic experiences worth remebering. Everybody who went into theatre to watch Lwrence of Arabia, remembers the train scene. It is one of the main prospect of entertainment. But in present days, there are many streming services and DVDs are available through which people enjoy these cinematic moments. While these streming services can't provide the super experiences that people are used to, they are stiil pretty good. In this paragraph, we will discuss a memo from the advertising director of a Super Screen Movie Production Company and will try to find loopholes in the statement.
Firstly, the director told us about the budget about advertising. While it is a good idea, there is no mention that, this extra budget will be cut from movie's production budget. If that happens, the extra marketing money won't bring that much success in this regard.
Secondly, the director told us about the competition between two years. But what about the movie theatre condition? The director should have mentioned about the theatre environment and to properly evaluate this statement, we need to know if the previous year's theatre condition were better. And sometimes good reviews won't bring people to the movie theatre. Avatar is the highest grossing film of all time but the same year Coen brother's 'A serious Man' received more positive review and it didn't came close in competition with Avatar. So we should look into that. A small family drama won't bring much as does a Blockbuster.
Thirdly, now a days more streaming services like Netflix, Amazon Prime are available. Now a days, people doesn't go to the cinema rather they wait at home and wait for the release of the cinema in the streaming services. This is happeing because cinema costs more and these streaming services are quite popular among young generations.
Finally, is the cinema fiving us the theatritical experience? Quentin Tarantino said it himself that, now a days they are unable to provide the experience that people are used to and sometime this causes the decrease in the number of movie- goers. The avengers Infinity War certainly didn't have the problem. In this horrible time, it managed to gain a chunk of money and became the fourth highest grossing film of all time. So movie production company company should invest more in developing cinema that can bring people joy and compell the people to leave the streaming services and join the cinema.
Investing more only in the marketing purposes for a movie won't bring much people to the theatre. The distribution and production company should invest more in giving us cinematic experience like Gone with the wind. That will bring more people in the theatre.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2235 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.838 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.452 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.819 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.481 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 381, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... moments. While these streming services cant provide the super experiences that peop...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...tement, we need to know if the previous years theatre condition were better. And some...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...an received more positive review and it didnt came close in competition with Avatar. ...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...g much as does a Blockbuster. Thirdly, now a days more streaming services like Netflix, A...
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Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ch as does a Blockbuster. Thirdly, now a days more streaming services like Netflix, A...
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Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
...ke Netflix, Amazon Prime are available. Now a days, people doesnt go to the cinema rather ...
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Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...etflix, Amazon Prime are available. Now a days, people doesnt go to the cinema rather ...
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Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...Prime are available. Now a days, people doesnt go to the cinema rather they wait at ho...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...Quentin Tarantino said it himself that, now a days they are unable to provide the experien...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...tin Tarantino said it himself that, now a days they are unable to provide the experien...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...rs. The avengers Infinity War certainly didnt have the problem. In this horrible time...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: company
...g film of all time. So movie production company company should invest more in developing cinema...
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Line 6, column 70, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...rketing purposes for a movie wont bring much people to the theatre. The distribution...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99340659341 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52748781649 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492307692308 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9552437086 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1481481481 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8518518519 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148747535579 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389291671831 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054730418606 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777206287736 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609278613999 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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