In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
The prompt recommends that to ensure highway safety, the roads should emulate the project of Butler County. The prompt is based on many unwarranted assumptions and to substantiate the recommendation three pieces of evidence must be provided.
Firstly, it is assumed that adopting the same kind of project as Butler County will guarantee immediate success. Perhaps the project which was completed in Butler County was successful because the people were more obedient to rules. Moreover, the population of county was low and traffic on roads was less. Due to which the number of accidents were less. It is likely that the nature of accidents was minor and that’s why number of accidents reported were low. Thus, a research study of above mentioned scenarios be carried out so that we can substantiate the claim.
Secondly, it is assumed that if the key aspects of butler county project are emulated, Prunty County will have the same kind of improvement as Butler county had. Perhaps it possible that Prunty county already has same lane width as that of Butler county. It is likely that the population of people using vehicles in Prunty County is much more that Butler County. Even though the width of lanes is substantial, it is not wide enough to handle the traffic of Prunty County. If above scenario is true, the argument does not hold water
Thirdly, it is erroneously assumed that the Project of Butler County was successful. It is possible that the number of reported accidents was low in last year. However, it is also possible that the number of accidents were high last year but most of them were not reported. Moreover, it is likely that the average number of yearly accidents has remained but only the number of reported accident has decreased significantly. If the above scenario is true the conclusion is significantly weakened.
In sum, the conclusion as it stands is flawed. A research study needs to be carried out incorporating all of the scenarios mentioned above to further substantiate the recommendation to emulate the Butler county Project in order to improve highway safety
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 425, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d accident has decreased significantly. If the above scenario is true the conclusi...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y needs to be carried out incorporating all of the scenarios mentioned above to further su...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00857142857 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72284515063 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422857142857 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2547952926 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2631578947 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219668430379 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722036267139 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547493708776 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125038493708 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431551359869 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 425, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d accident has decreased significantly. If the above scenario is true the conclusi...
^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y needs to be carried out incorporating all of the scenarios mentioned above to further su...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00857142857 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72284515063 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422857142857 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2547952926 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2631578947 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219668430379 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722036267139 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547493708776 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125038493708 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431551359869 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.