In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author argues that Prunty County should follow the example of Butler County, improving its road network in order to improve highway safety as the measure of decreasing the speed limit was not effective. This argument is based on the premises that after the implementation of decreased speed, the car accidents did not present a decline and also the applied measure of enhancing the road conditions in Butler County was resultive. However, on deeper analysis, it is apparent that there certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the assumption that the enhancement of the road network in Prunty County will have positive result as the respective measure in Butler Company. Though, it is possible that the road condition in highway in Prunty County to be in a very good level and additional improvements may are waste of money and time. To strengthen his/her argument, the author should mention a report from the highway police department in Prunty County which would depict a possible endangered condition of the road for the drivers.
Moreover, the author is incorrectly based his argument on the premise that the declined statistics of car accidents in Butler County succeed despite the stable speed limit of 55 miles per hour. However, this argument is ambiguous as the car accidents which keep going to happen may is the consequence of high speed. To overcome this flaw, the author should make a reference to a report from the highway patrol station in Butler County which would cite explicitly data about the main causes of the car accidents depicting a minus contribution of the high speed to these.
The author also wrongly correlates statistics of car accidents among two Counties which each one is depicting a different chronological range.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1701 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.018 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.022 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.68 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...istaken assumptions and logical flaws. One such flaw is the assumption that the...
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...Company. Though, it is possible that the road condition in highway in Prunty Coun...
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...condition of the road for the drivers. Moreover, the author is incorrectly base...
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...ntribution of the high speed to these. The author also wrongly correlates stati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13313609467 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7710334622 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.4734354688 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.583333333 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306603568314 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110144924865 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084309452859 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149305746503 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100886007754 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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