The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editor from a Central Plaza owner argues that the city should prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza in order the business which located there to increase their customers again. This argument is based on the premises that the last two years the number of shooppes is permantly declinining while the popularity of skateboard has increased and also the litters and the vandalim are more intese throughout the plaza. However, on deeper anlaysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of logical flaws and mistaken assumptions.
One such flaw is the assumtion that the decline of the customers on the business in Central Plaza is due to the simultaneoulsy increasd polularity of skateboarding in the area. Though, it is possible that the decrease on the number of the shoppers could be a depiction of the disapproval and disapointment of former customers about the quality and the cost of the products of the stores in Plaza. In order to stenghthen this argumnet, the editor should present a research on the former shoppers which would demonstrate that the skateboading was the main reason which guided them to turn their back on the enterprises of Plaza.
Moreover, the editor incorrectly argues that the increased litters and vandalism throughout the plaza is due to skateboarders. However, this situation could be explained by the actions of bad rumored gangsters of the local rea who are prefer to hang around the Plaza at nights. In order to overcome this flaw, the editor should cite reports from shoppers and businessmen of Plaza which would demosntrate that indeed skateboarders bandalize the stores and around area and throw their litters out of the bins.
The editor also wrongly makes the assumption that a possible prohibition of skateboarding in Plaza will increase the customers of stores in Plaza again. Though, it is possible that former customers have found more interesesting markets in these two years and are so satisfied that they have no desire and enthusiasm to return to the stores of Plaza even if the skateboarding was the prominent cause which led them to change their.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay, show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: This argument is based on the premises that the last two years the number of shooppes is permantly declinining while the popularity of skateboard has increased and also the litters and the vandalim are more intese throughout the plaza.
Error: intese Suggestion: intense
Error: permantly Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: declinining Suggestion: declining
Error: shooppes Suggestion: shopped
Error: skateboard Suggestion: skate board
Error: vandalim Suggestion: vandalize
Sentence: However, on deeper anlaysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of logical flaws and mistaken assumptions.
Error: anlaysis Suggestion: analysis
Sentence: One such flaw is the assumtion that the decline of the customers on the business in Central Plaza is due to the simultaneoulsy increasd polularity of skateboarding in the area.
Error: skateboarding Suggestion: skate boarding
Error: simultaneoulsy Suggestion: simultaneously
Error: polularity Suggestion: popularity
Error: increasd Suggestion: increase
Error: assumtion Suggestion: assumption
Sentence: Though, it is possible that the decrease on the number of the shoppers could be a depiction of the disapproval and disapointment of former customers about the quality and the cost of the products of the stores in Plaza.
Error: depiction Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: disapointment Suggestion: disappointment
Sentence: In order to stenghthen this argumnet, the editor should present a research on the former shoppers which would demonstrate that the skateboading was the main reason which guided them to turn their back on the enterprises of Plaza.
Error: skateboading Suggestion: skate boating
Error: argumnet Suggestion: argument
Error: stenghthen Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: Moreover, the editor incorrectly argues that the increased litters and vandalism throughout the plaza is due to skateboarders.
Error: vandalism Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, this situation could be explained by the actions of bad rumored gangsters of the local rea who are prefer to hang around the Plaza at nights.
Error: rea Suggestion: red
Sentence: In order to overcome this flaw, the editor should cite reports from shoppers and businessmen of Plaza which would demosntrate that indeed skateboarders bandalize the stores and around area and throw their litters out of the bins.
Error: demosntrate Suggestion: demonstrate
Error: bandalize Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The editor also wrongly makes the assumption that a possible prohibition of skateboarding in Plaza will increase the customers of stores in Plaza again.
Error: skateboarding Suggestion: skate boarding
Sentence: Though, it is possible that former customers have found more interesesting markets in these two years and are so satisfied that they have no desire and enthusiasm to return to the stores of Plaza even if the skateboarding was the prominent cause which led them to change their.
Error: skateboarding Suggestion: skate boarding
Error: interesesting Suggestion: interesting
Sentence: The recommendations in the essay, show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 23 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1965 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.051 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.849 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.458 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he editor from a Central Plaza owner argue...
^^
Line 2, column 461, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...his argumnet, the editor should present a research on the former shoppers which would demo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... bad rumored gangsters of the local rea who are prefer to hang around the Plaza at nigh...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
...ored gangsters of the local rea who are prefer to hang around the Plaza at nights. In ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12853470437 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89466546661 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470437017995 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.52062747 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.25 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4166666667 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331612992931 0.218282227539 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125506459213 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920146535873 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174741911591 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114109558128 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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