On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals
Although the commendation presented in the letter to an editor seems to be rational on the first glance, the limitation of rented mopeds up to 25 per day is riddled with some logical flaws.
At first, it is unclear how this measure to put limits on only rented vehicles can reduce the number of road accidents. The town council should investigate the question whether there are drivers of rented mopeds who are culprits. Perhaps, the result of the investigation will show that pedestrians are the main source of problems on roads. For example, they can cross roads in restricted areas where drivers can hardly see them traversing. Also, it might be hidden behind that people who have their own mopeds violate road rules more than those who rent vehicles. In this case, the measure to limit only rented mopeds will not solve the problem.
The letter provides some specific numbers which need to check. For example, it pays attentions that the promoted measure will reduce road accidents up to 50 percent as it happened on the other island. At first, it is not lucid why the reduction from 50 to 25 mopeds per day will lead to this result. Perhaps, the town council must put more severe measures and gives the permission to rent only 10 mopeds to achieve this. Moreover, since Balmer Island is planning to adapt Seaville’s measure to curtail the number of accidents, more information needs to be collected. For instance, how much the situation there correlates this one on Balmer Island, whether there were other measure to be taken which would lead to this 50% going down and others. Without answering these questions, it is irrational to limit the number of rented mopeds, because it might not work for this island.
This suggested measure should be applied within summer months, because the population increases to 100 000 during this time. This fact requires more attention, since now this number does not look like a strong argument to the recommendation. First, it is unclear how it corresponds with the density, because, for example, the territory of the land is great that this grow does not affect much the problem of road accidents. Maybe this step should be on the constant basis. Moreover, this increase can be more intensive during other seasons, thus, road accidents happen more often in winter or spring.
To sum up, based on the arguments I provided in this essay, the recommendation to restrict rented moped may not work well as it is supposed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: who is a are
...ther there are drivers of rented mopeds who are culprits. Perhaps, the result of the in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90238095238 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53673576564 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1475105804 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.95 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211159962158 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684034575707 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485210041191 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104592610729 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499915634659 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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