The business district of downtown Laughton is thriving during the weekdays but is virtually uninhabited during the weekends. As a result, many of the shops and restaurants close during this time, though the proprietors must still pay rent. Since many such businesses have struggled over the last year, the mayor of Laughton has proposed that a nearby, abandoned twenty-acre plot of land that houses a few dilapidated warehouses be converted into a park. Once completed, the park will serve as a weekend attraction for many families living in Laughton. As a result, many will frequent the restaurants and shops, thereby reinvigorating these struggling businesses. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The success of the proposed plan of converting warehouses to a park in the business district of Laughton to help the struggling shops and restaurants depends on a number of unwarranted assumptions. If these unstated assumptions are proven to be incorrect, the plan will not succeed.
First and foremost, it is assumed that the reason why businesses such as shops and restaurants of the business district have suffered over the last year, is that the district isn’t crowded on the weedends, and that if the latter issue is mitigated, the shops and restaurants won’t struggle anymore. However, it might be the case that the locals don’t shop or go to restaurants in that district on weekdays as well, or maybe the rents are so high, that even if the shops had enough customer on weekends, they would still be struggling.
Moreover, it is assumed that a park would attract families of Laughton to the business district on weekends. The reason why the district is uninhabited on weekends might not be the lack of entertainment in the area. For instance, there might not be enough housing areas in the district and most people prefer to go to parks near where they live on the weekends.
Furthermore, it is assumed that if people go to the new park in this district on weekends, they will also eat out and shop. Exorbitant prices of shops and restaurants in the business district might drive away customers, and they might prefer to have a picnic at the park instead of eating out or going shopping. Therefore, more people being in the district on weekends won’t necessarily affect the profit made by the shops and restaurants.
All in all, the plan to ameliorate the struggle of shops and restaurant of the business district depends on numerous assumptions. In case any of these unwarranted assumptions doesn’t hold, not only will the shops continue to struggle, the city will also have spent a great amount of money and resources on building a park in vain.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1585 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.635 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.661 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.057 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.692 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aurants won’t struggle anymore. However, it might be the case that the locals don...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88427299703 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77545326422 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445103857567 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2011710128 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.166666667 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173016125418 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754701850972 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423321951514 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10552763829 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385193838297 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.3550499002 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.197005988 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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