The citizens of London have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing carbohydrate, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of fat, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted
In this argument, the author claims that the citizens of London have adopted more healthful lifestyles. To support her argument, she cites a survey which shows their eating habit observing more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did then years ago. Also, she says there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food which contains carbohydrate proved to reduce cholesterol and there has been reduce of buying of food which contain fat. This argument seems plausible first, however, careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has several logical problems.
To begin with, based on the survey which indicate the respondents' eating habit follows government nutritional recommendation well than ten years ago, the author assumes that the respondents of the survey can be representative all people of London. However, the people who reply the survey cannot be generalized. Common sense tells us that the people who reply those kinds of survey have big interest in health or have tendency to follow the recommendations. If this is true, we cannot be convinced by this argument.
Secondly, even if we admit that the respondents of the survey is general people in the city based on the same fact which I mentioned just above paragraph, she assumes that following the recommendations is healthy life styles. However, the recommendation could be harmful in some cases. For example, many people have their own body trait and life styles. So their weight, rate of metabolism, amount of hormone, amount of exercise is different according to each person. Because of these differences, following the recommendation can downplay one's health. If she cannot rule out this problem, this argument is not cogent.
Thirdly, even if we admit other problems are true, there is another problem. Based on the fact that the selling of the food products which contain carbohydrates have increased four-times, she presumes that food which contains carbohydrate whose effect is reducing cholesterol has similar function with the substance. However, it could not be true. For example, there are many foods which are advertised to have beneficial substances for health. Among them, however, few would work helpfully to health. Until why she thinks the food have same function with carbohydrate, this argument has no ground.
To summarize, this argument is still dubious as it stands. To make this argument more persuasive, the author has to explain why she thinks the recommendation could be applied for all citizens of London and must give additional information which shows that we can consider the respondents of the survey as common case in the city. We have to know that the food beneficially work for health as similar as the original substance, carbohydrate to evaluate this argument better.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2291 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.125 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.775 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.435 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.053 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.696 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...o reduce cholesterol and there has been reduce of buying of food which contain fat. Th...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 541, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...llowing the recommendation can downplay ones health. If she cannot rule out this pro...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, as to, for example, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29306487696 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86824277387 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48322147651 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 68.9235350675 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.869565217 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4347826087 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244238449999 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711673769763 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10750970066 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147270458387 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0987385204831 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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