The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
The arguement provided is concerned with two different shops who are thinking of opening one of their branch in Salem, on the basis of two different ideaologies. But none of them provided correct data to prove their point.
The data provided here for the growing population can not be jusitified and the median of the salary of the area is also not supported with any clear facts. The huge median of the salary provided here doesn't have a strong base to completely use it to conclude a point. Moving on to Namens demand of opening their store in the suburb because of the increase in teh median income, it gives the reader a sense of doubt that even if ther eis increase in the income of the family, it doesn't give any strong supporting statement that they will buy their cloths from a high end faishon retailer. They can be interested in their own custom made garments, that is way more cheaper and comfortable for many. And people living in sub urbs are not much concerned on investing on cloths but are more interested in livestock and lands. So being in a bubble of having greater sales in a suburb is harmful to the business.
Now the other competitor, Roscoe, believes that sub urbs are more family oriented and therefore their store will be more profitable. This statement can be true to some extent but clearly the arguement does not provide any clear statistics of the kind of people that are residing in the Salem area, we can not conclude anything.
Hence from the arguments provided, noe of the business can set up their shops in Salem, unitl they survey the are and accordingly select which one will go. But this is just a hypothetical situation in reality. Because nowadays who cooperat with its competitors, even when it will not benefit the business in any way.
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Suggestion: cheaper
...r own custom made garments, that is way more cheaper and comfortable for many. And people li...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...ea, we can not conclude anything. Hence from the arguments provided, noe of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 316.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67405063291 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47562018922 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512658227848 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6911367217 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.615384615 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3076923077 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0870447916437 0.218282227539 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0276231590328 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311748828418 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0468147573578 0.128457276422 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277711446728 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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