"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
The author of this argument claims that the Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. However, reader needs further evidence to verify the argument offered by the author.
To begin with, the author mentioned that the housing costs have fallen significantly, while the taxes remain lower than other towns, which allow people to buy a real estate, and settled down in Clearview. However, author failed to indicate the specific numbers of data. For example, if the average taxes of these area, included Clearview, had been above the average of entire nation. Even, if Clearview is lower in comparison to its neighboring towns, its taxes is still higher than most of the places.
But it is also worth considering that whether the new program such as improve school, streets, public services, will be a temptation for people want to retire in Clearview. The author failed to consider that, the construction of these program needs time, which is not a sufficient resource for retire people, in other words, they don’t have time to wait the construction. Furthermore, there’s no evidence provided by the author that the retire people would tend to stay in town, and using these public facilities. What if the retire people tend to do outdoor activities, like hiking or fishing, which remain questions that whether Clearview has these kinds of natural resources for retirees to do or not.
Last but not least, another evidence proposed by author is that the number of physicians is greater than national average, which can be related to excellent health care. Nevertheless, people might still only want to find few specific physicians, that they are familiar. As a result, the number of physicians seem to be a weak evidence for people to believe that the health care will grow positively.
To sum up the arguer fails to substantiate his claim that Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. Because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make it more convincing, the author would have to demonstrate that the specific numbers of data, such as taxes and the average price of housing costs, and show if there is any natural resources for outdoor activities, last, provide another evidence for reader to believe that the health care will grow positively. As a result, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2022 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.826 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.804 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'seeks'.
Suggestion: seeks
...rview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. However, reader need...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 308, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
...a. For example, if the average taxes of these area, included Clearview, had been above the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 434, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...no evidence provided by the author that the retire people would tend to stay in town, and ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 523, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... using these public facilities. What if the retire people tend to do outdoor activities, l...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 103, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'seeks'.
Suggestion: seeks
...rview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. Because the evidence...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 130, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e for anyone seeking a place to retire. Because the evidence cited in the analysis does...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, while, for example, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03349282297 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59538396934 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480861244019 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7838113846 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.764705882 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27951344632 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904650014691 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924541280043 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160750432113 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637351687927 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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