"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it.A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
The author claims that addition of bicycle lane to Blue Highway would reduce the traffic jam. He cites an example of Green Highway and keen bicyclist to support his argument. The argument, however, is based on several assumptions it need to be substantiated with further evidence.
Firstly, author assumes that the commuters complaint that increase rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburb and the city center has double their commuting time, it is only because of the rush-hour traffic. But there can be other factors that are responsible for doubling their commuting time. It is possible that there is no traffic signal or traffic controller on the Blue Highway and therefore traffic is not get managed properly. Even if there is a traffic controller then it is possible that he can’t handle all the traffic. It is also possible that even after there is a traffic signal and traffic controller available, the time for which vehicles have to wait on signal is very large, this factors are also responsible for doubling the commuting time. Thus, author has not considered other factors to support his argument.
Secondly, author assumes that the proposal of the motorist to widen the highway, or adding the additional lane seems unconvincing decision to author because the addition of lane on the Green Highway has worsen the traffic. However, author does not take into consideration the relative traffic of Green Highway and Blue Highway. Again the type of vehicle that passes through the highway, if heavy load vehicles, such as, trucks passes through Green Highway’s additional lane then, it is quite possible that even they add one more lane on Green Highway the traffic will always get jam. But what applies to Green Highway may not be applicable to Blue Highway. So the author's argument seems unconvincing here because he has not taken into consideration the relative traffic on Blue Highway and types of vehicles that passes through that Highway.
Thirdly, author presupposes that the solution for the traffic jam problem is to add bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Author states that many area residents are keen bicyclist. In spite of the residents are keen bicyclist, it is possible that every resident does not have bicycle, or even if they had bicycle they would prefer to go with vehicle to save their commuting time. In addition there can be residents who are above 60-70 age, so they were not able to use bicycle for commuting. So the authors solution of adding bicycle lane would not be applicable to each resident.
Lastly, author concludes that adding bicycle lane would encourage people to use bicycle and so would reduce the rush-hour traffic rather than increasing. But even after considering all the factors mentioned above for the bicyclist, they add bicycle lane but people are still using vehicles then this is not a profitable move and will not offer solution to the traffic problem.
Thus, to strengthen the argument the author should give other factors responsible for increasing commuting time, how much is the traffic on Blue Highway and Green Highway, which types of vehicles passes through Blue Highway and no of bicycle users, before considering that adding bicycle lane will reduce traffic problem.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2657 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.966 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.447 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.613 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.864 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...He cites an example of Green Highway and keen bicyclist to support his argument. ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bstantiated with further evidence. Firstly, author assumes that the commute...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'commuters'' or 'commuter's'?
Suggestion: commuters'; commuter's
... Firstly, author assumes that the commuters complaint that increase rush-hour traff...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r factors to support his argument. Secondly, author assumes that the propos...
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Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
...dition of lane on the Green Highway has worsen the traffic. However, author does not t...
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Line 9, column 675, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t be applicable to Blue Highway. So the authors argument seems unconvincing here becaus...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that passes through that Highway. Thirdly, author presupposes that the sol...
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Line 13, column 274, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'bicycled'.
Suggestion: bicycled
...sible that every resident does not have bicycle, or even if they had bicycle they would...
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Line 13, column 303, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[3]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'bicycled'.
Suggestion: bicycled
...s not have bicycle, or even if they had bicycle they would prefer to go with vehicle to...
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Line 13, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ehicle to save their commuting time. In addition there can be residents who are above 60...
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Line 13, column 497, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...le to use bicycle for commuting. So the authors solution of adding bicycle lane would n...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d not be applicable to each resident. Lastly, author concludes that adding bic...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r solution to the traffic problem. Thus, to strengthen the argument the aut...
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Line 19, column 234, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ehicles passes through Blue Highway and no of bicycle users, before considering th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, in addition, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2741.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 535.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12336448598 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54513557287 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.370093457944 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.0 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3650405189 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.590909091 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3181818182 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367236703952 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128026716849 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111451451522 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197952968617 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882326410113 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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