The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers.
In this argument the author claims that government of Batavia should regulate retail milk prices to make sure fair prices for consumers. However this argument depends on several unsubstantiated assumptions and it is unpersuasive as it stands.
First of all, the author’s sated that percentage of number of dairy farms is now greater than it was 10 years ago but the reliability of the increment is questionable. While the percentage increased, the sample size of its farms need to mentioned. If the sample size of the dairy farms was extremely small, this data is not the actual reason of excessive profits on increased of milk. Also, each dairy farms have different capacity of reproducing amount of milk. Even if the number of farms increased, it is possible that current farm has less capacity than the past. For example, if one individual farm in the past can produce 5 times more than a current individual farm, there is no much difference between decades. Therefore, further evidence of actual sample size and the producing capacity of each farms needed to support the claim. Unless the author offers sufficient data, this assumption is logically flawed.
Similarly, increased price of product are not guarantee the author’s claim that farmers are receiving excessive profits. Although the local Excello Food market had increased price of milk, this is not representing whole of Batavia milk prices and profits. For example, there might have some other reasons that only Excello Food market has to increase all of the products price. Furthermore, compare with 10 years ago, the inflation rate might be increased due to the development. Also, other process of producing milk can be added, such as sanitizing process. Those factors can influenced the price of milk. As the presented figure could affect the price of products and people can misunderstand of the profits.
In sum, the author’s claim is not very well supported. Evidence of precise date and causing fact of increment of price is crucial in validating the claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1658 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.979 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...to make sure fair prices for consumers. However this argument depends on several unsubs...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...han a current individual farm, there is no much difference between decades. Theref...
^^
Line 9, column 357, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...nly Excello Food market has to increase all of the products price. Furthermore, compare wi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18618618619 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79864091114 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525525525526 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1200873038 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.8947368421 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278951966586 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819857388043 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724309486017 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132669540072 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076025868369 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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