Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before.
In the article the author mentions that Sartorian company used to sell alpaca coat until five years ago, but then they had to discontinue production because the supply of high quality wool fabric which was not reliable. Now that there is a new supplier, they can resume production. This will increase the business and profitability of the company. This is based on the arguments that customers were frustrated when they stopped sale of the overcoats because they all loved the quality of their coat that no competitor could produce.
Apparently the author has some valid points, but it is necessary to validate the plausibility of the arguments presented and the underlying assumptions.
Customers’ ”outcry”, when the production and sale of the alpaca coats were discontinued, proves that the overcoats produced by Sartorian was really high quality and high demand. Then why the decision had to be taken to stop selling it? Reason sited was, unreliable supply of the wool fabric. Question that should first comes to someone’s mind is, is that root cause now addressed? Is the new supplier fully reliable? The answer to that is not given in the write up.
Even if we are assured that the supplier is a reliable one, the next thing that we should get confirmed is the assumption on demand. Five years ago there was demand due to high quality of Sartarian’s coats. But in this long period, there may be ample causes that can drive down this demand. There is a chance that in today’s fashion, people do not use alpaca coats any more. Competitors who produced inferior quality coats earlier, may have improved their quality. And finally, as agreed by the author himself or herself, prices of clothing have gone up. So there is no certainty people will go for alpaca coat. There may be cheaper, better and more fashionable alternatives in today’s marker.
Last but not the least, author is talking about increased profitability. Even if all the above arguments go in favor of the author and we assume sale will be very high, we need to go to the computation table and estimate the revenue-cost relations to understand whether an increase in sale will really result in increase in profit. There are other factors such as cost of raw materials, transportation or labor, that may have increased quite a lot in this time.
Unless substantiated by these details, the author’s point of view cannot be fully supported.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.739 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.79 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.255 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ble? The answer to that is not given in the write up. Even if we are assured that the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, finally, first, if, may, really, so, then, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03676470588 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90995582389 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53431372549 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.5932546985 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.347826087 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5652173913 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274628149694 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679899478749 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724110194383 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108541450087 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08320818183 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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