Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. This demand and the overall increase in clothing prices will make Sartorian's alpaca overcoats more profitable than ever before.
A company’s manager hopes that new supply and new strategy will make the business profitable. At first glance, this seems plausible for a reader but on scrutiny we come to notice that the assumption is fallacious. The author makes several assumption that need to be addressed before reaching any conclusion.
First and foremost, five years ago the company had difficulty in collecting high quality wool fabrics. But now they find new suppliers to resume production. They are hoping for profit since the overcoat was demanding five years ago. The basis of this assumption is flawed for several reasons. The author has not mention anything related to why they were out of supplies five years ago. The author is not clear about how they are getting supplies this time. The company should enumerate past experiences before starting to think about profit. Does the suppliers will be long-lasting? What are the reasons that the supplies stopped 5 years ago? Does we have enough manpower to continue the production? Without going through these questions assuming that the company will make a profit doesn’t seem plausible.
Furthermore, the author thinks that they will have the same customer demand as five years ago. This assumption can be true but without sufficient evidences the author should not reach into conclusion. The demand for overcoat five years ago may not be the same as now. There has other factors that should be considered like change of fashion, change of demand like weather can be different than five years ago. The author has not mentioned anything about these factors that can warrant his assumption on overcoat demand.
Moreover, the author mentions that other competitors are not offering a comparable product so the demand for Sartorian’s overcoat will be high which will lead the company to profit higher. Again this assumption has flaws because of lack of further information. Before making any conclusion the company should analyze why other companies are not offering any such product. Maybe they are offering different product or different design that can surpass the need of overcoat or they are something more relatable to time and fashion. But the author hasn’t done any such analysis.
Lastly, the recommendation that the author made upon some assumption maybe true, but before starting production of overcoat the company should scrutinize factors that can jeopardize the business in the future.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1995 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.063 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.499 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.76 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.288 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.36 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...umption is fallacious. The author makes several assumption that need to be addressed before reachi...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
...for several reasons. The author has not mention anything related to why they were out o...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ey were out of supplies five years ago. The author is not clear about how they are ...
^^^
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ow they are getting supplies this time. The company should enumerate past experienc...
^^^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...this time. The company should enumerate past experiences before starting to think about profit. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 645, Rule ID: DOES_YOU[1]
Message: Did you mean 'do'? 'does' is only used for the third person singular (he/she/it).
Suggestion: Do
... that the supplies stopped 5 years ago? Does we have enough manpower to continue the...
^^^^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...of demand like weather can be different than five years ago. The author has not ment...
^^^^
Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... jeopardize the business in the future.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, may, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26530612245 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67489908609 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479591836735 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6690580647 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.56 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.68 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203190014162 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659860484712 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595093911866 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112975133515 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731391874788 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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