Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before.
In this argument the author conclude that when they bring their new product of overcoat then the people will accept the overall increased price and that will result into achieve more profit to them. But this conclusion is based on many different assumptions and such assumptions does not have any supporting evidence provided by the author and so the result many not be as per the author conclude to us.
Firstly, when the company had decided to discontinue the production of the popular alpaca overcoat due to in decrease in quality supply of the wool fabric, It is not fix that the people will judge this by saying that they are forced on only the quality product but they can also judge that some thing bad happens with there product and so this kind of step by the company may be beneficial to them in some ways and may be not in some other way.For instance a company in the Germany had decided to sale only the quality product by due to some production issues they can not remain fix in their speech and so many customer had decided to not take that company's product. So in the same way the author will not decide to have a good step by doing so.
Secondly, After getting new fabric for their product it is not fix that that new coat will be as good as the old one and so may result in many questions as does the people like the new product more then the old one? ,does the consumer will pay more for the new product? and there were many different aspects on which the people will decide to buy their product and that will be not sure that due to there previous name in the market they will be appreciated all the time. For instance, Nokia is well developed company in the early 20's and were so popular mobile company but decided to discontinue there product with the new software arises so many consumer were disappointed by this and so after many time now Nokia is developing their mobiles with the latest software will not result to that the consumer will be agree with there new product and buy them.
Thirdly, when there is a competitor in the field the result of the sales will not be pre-predicted because there are certain aspects which get affected for both of them and if the competing compony is selling the same kind of product in cheaper rates then there is no chance to have more sales compare to previous one and so this will rise many of the questions such as does the competing company is been selling more quality products? does people are more doing towards the quality products? and many more will result in to decide the sale of the product of the old company.
Finally, there are many factors which are not covered by the author and so such factors is not supported any proper evidence the author conclusion is not likely to be happen.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2233 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.387 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.175 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.908 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.747 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.234 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...o them. But this conclusion is based on many different assumptions and such assumptions does n...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t be as per the author conclude to us. Firstly, when the company had decided to...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...ty product but they can also judge that some thing bad happens with there product and so t...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...e ways and may be not in some other way.For instance a company in the Germany had d...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun customer seems to be countable; consider using: 'many customers'.
Suggestion: many customers
...n not remain fix in their speech and so many customer had decided to not take that companys p...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...es the people like the new product more then the old one? ,does the consumer will pa...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the new product more then the old one? ,does the consumer will pay more for the ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...umer will pay more for the new product? and there were many different aspects on wh...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ore for the new product? and there were many different aspects on which the people will decide...
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Line 5, column 644, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun consumer seems to be countable; consider using: 'many consumers'.
Suggestion: many consumers
...product with the new software arises so many consumer were disappointed by this and so after ...
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Line 7, column 389, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the questions such as does the competing company is been selling more quality pro...
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Line 7, column 399, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...ons such as does the competing company is been selling more quality products? doe...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
... is been selling more quality products? does people are more doing towards the quali...
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Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ore doing towards the quality products? and many more will result in to decide the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, for instance, kind of, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 508.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46653543307 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20708798363 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.352362204724 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 175.504985684 57.8364921388 303% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 189.083333333 119.503703932 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.3333333333 23.324526521 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.70786347227 207% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112447676567 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492706278972 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349660091576 0.0701772020484 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0633598026026 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421193426591 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 14.3799401198 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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