Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services.
I the given note, the author presents his opinion that we should go back to the service of Buzoff, which was serving Palm City earlier and still continues to serve Wintervale warehouse. The justification given here is, Palm City’s food damage due to pest, is higher, in dollar value, compared to Wintervale. Author mentions that Fly-Away’s service charges are considerably lower than Buzzoff, but is hopeful that the pest damage is much more compared to the benefit of reduced service charges.
The assertion seems quite justified until scrutinized in depth. Firstly, the pet damage accounts for $20,000 in Palm City where Fly-Away is providing the pest control services, whereas it’s only $10,000 in Wintervale where the vendor is Buzoff. The note never mentions the apparent size of the two warehouses. Just in case, Palm City is much larger compared to Wintervale, the damage at Palm City may be only 2% whereas it may be 20% for Wintervale. In that case, it becomes obvious that Fly-Away is doing a commendable job only in their first year of service, although the lost may be much higher in Palm City in terms of absolute dollar value.
Secondly, Palm City’s services are cheaper, and that saves some cost. The savings made through this, should be combined with the loss due to pest damage, before any comparison can be made. It can so happen that the savings in service cost outweighs the loss due to pest damage.
Also, the note doesn’t mention how Buzzoff had been doing at Palm City in the previous years before Fly-Away replaced them. It is important to know the average pest damage per year in previous years of service by Buzz off, and then compare that with the current year’s loss when Fly-Away is the vendor. Only that can make a cogent and veritable comparison based on which such an important decision can be made.
Finally, Fly-Away is only one year in the service, and may be going through some teething problems in the initial period. Buzzoff being an incumbent, it knows the nuances of the job and, therefore, ius expected to do a better job. It makes sense to allow Fly-Away to continue for at least one more years before taking any decision to remove them from the pest control service and reinstate Buzzoff.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 02
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.645 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.311 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.805 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, whereas, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9012987013 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53077399251 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516883116883 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.838015766 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232882803745 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077744330121 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604086784202 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135779123703 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135581958051 0.0628817314937 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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