The following appeared in an editorial in a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author states in the argument that increased rush hour trafic on blue highway has doubled the computing time hence they are two proposals being made one is to widen the highway and the other is to add a bicylcle lane which suggest that it will be better and easire option as the residents are keen bicyclist and will prefer commuting via bicylcles.The author also provideds unwarranted evidences to support his argument which on deeper scrutiny reveals that none of the evidences provided are well suited to support the authors claim hence , lets scrutinize further.
Firstly the auhtor unnecessiarly claims that the green highway traffic has got worse after the addition of the extra lane this evidence is not supported by any data or information which gives us the better idea that the evidence provided by the author is valid as it may be possible that the traffic noticed was on a particular day which had increase in traffic due to and accident or due to heavy rains which is quite a bpossibility hence, then unwarrated assumption made by the author that the widening the blue highway may also cause traffic like green highway and also if the author claims are ri9ght about the traffic getting worse at green highway then on what basis can the author judge that the blue highway may cause the same as for comparing any two things there shouold be some common ground which is not provided by author their can be chances that the green highway traffic increased due to shift of trafic from blue highway which not that well constructed hence this claim made by the author is not strong enough.
Secondly, the author gives an alternative to decrease the traffic at blue highway by adding a bicycle lane on the bassis of the evidence that the residents of the area are keen bicyclist which is again and assumption made by the author that if the residents are keen bicyclist they would prefer commuting via bicycles this an unnecssary asumption because their is no information provided regarding the distance to be traveled by the residents to commute to the area they want to as it might be possible that the distance to be covered by the commuters is large and can not be covered by bicycles and also their is no survey or information provided that all the residents who commute are keen bicyclist there are chances that the ones who are keen bicylist in that area do not travel from the route of blue highway or do not travel at all hence this evidence provided by the author is weak.
Thirdly, the author sates that the bicycle lane will encourage the commuters to travel through bicycles which is not a reasonable option to be provided as there can be chances that the residents who are keen bicyclist take that as an hobby not an alternative to travel for work or personal travelling option the idea of making an lane for bicycle just on the basis that residents near by are keen bicylist is unwarranted as no information has been provided above to cinfirm that whether the people will prefer rthe alternative provided as it may be risky for people to travel via bicycle on the highway which can cause accidents aswell which is not considered by the author hence this evidence provided is not strong enough.
hence, if the author has to go forward with the idea of construncting a bicycle lane on the blue highway has to provide with valid data to answer all the doubts mentioned above to make the argument stronger which for now is weakened.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 608 350
No. of Characters: 2829 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.966 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.653 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.419 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 60.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.451 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.485 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.746 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: THE_NN_AND_THE_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'are'?
Suggestion: are
...e is to widen the highway and the other is to add a bicylcle lane which suggest th...
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Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...and will prefer commuting via bicylcles.The author also provideds unwarranted evide...
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Line 1, column 544, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...uited to support the authors claim hence , lets scrutinize further. Firstly t...
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Line 9, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...clist which is again and assumption made by the author that if the residents are ...
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Line 9, column 357, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...es this an unnecssary asumption because their is no information provided regarding th...
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Line 9, column 607, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...can not be covered by bicycles and also their is no survey or information provided th...
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Line 13, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that the bicycle lane will encourage the commuters to travel through bicycles whi...
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Line 13, column 233, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nts who are keen bicyclist take that as an hobby not an alternative to travel for ...
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Line 13, column 329, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...al travelling option the idea of making an lane for bicycle just on the basis that...
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Line 13, column 382, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...icycle just on the basis that residents near by are keen bicylist is unwarranted as no ...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...nce provided is not strong enough. hence, if the author has to go forward with t...
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Line 17, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g a bicycle lane on the blue highway has to provide with valid data to answer al...
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Line 17, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bicycle lane on the blue highway has to provide with valid data to answer all th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as for, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.6327345309 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 36.0 13.6137724551 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2864.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 607.0 441.139720559 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71828665568 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96360453597 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45224471763 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.342668863262 0.468620217663 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.0 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 121.0 22.8473053892 530% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 274.305377271 57.8364921388 474% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 572.8 119.503703932 479% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 121.4 23.324526521 520% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.4 5.70786347227 392% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141009270513 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885068830098 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389776174179 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885068830098 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389776174179 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 61.5 14.3799401198 428% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -42.88 48.3550499002 -89% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 49.3 12.197005988 404% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.28 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.98 8.32208582834 144% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 50.4 11.1389221557 452% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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