The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author here claims that limiting the number of mopeds rented by the companies from 50 per day to 25 per day will heavily reduce the moped accidents in lines with the results observed by similar restrictions in the neighboring island of Seaville. While it is true that limiting the number of mopeds rented can possibly reduce the number of accidents but it is not conspicuous. Balmer Island's town council needs to take into consideration the shrinking of business of companies and the problems faced in commuting by the tourist population due to these restrictions. Delving deeper into this issue will paint a better picture.
The statement has not mentioned the reason for moped accidents. It is possible that accidents are caused by poor road infrastructure, faulty mopeds, or failed traffic management. In order to reach any conclusion, the statement needs to provide background information about the infrastructure of the Islands. Given that the Island has a working and efficient traffic management system, the recommendation can be taken into consideration. In order to prevent road accidents, the council can have checkpoints to prevent overspeeding vehicles and manage the pedestrian and vehicle traffic. The council can also work on developing a better road infrastructure with different lanes for pedestrians and mopeds.
The argument posits that decreasing the number of mopeds on the roads will lead to reduced accidents but the argument fails to acknowledge the effect of the decision on the business and livelihood of the island's population. Summers are the time where these businesses make huge profits due to increased tourist population, restrictions at these times can draw severe criticism. In order to strengthen the claim, the author needs to provide statistical evidence about the dependence of the population on the moped business. In case a large number of households depend on the moped business the council cannot implement the recommendation. In order to prevent accidents, the council can instead work a subsidized community transport system and better traffic decongestion.
In order to reach any conclusion, the argument needs to provide statistical evidence regarding the implementation of similar restrictions in Seaville's town. The statement has not mentioned the dependence on mopeds as the means of transportation. The author needs to mention the statistics regarding the use of alternate transport services and the tourist population. In case the tourist population is low it will severely weaken the claims of the author. Mentioning about the road fracture will greatly help the town council to reach to accurate consensus.
In order to evaluate the recommendation for a limited number of motors, it is necessary to answer all the above-mentioned questions. If the argument can provide necessary and sufficient reasoning the recommendation can be considered as a good alternative to prevent accidents between mopeds and pedestrians.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2478 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.364 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.094 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 87 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...at limiting the number of mopeds rented can possibly reduce the number of accidents but it i...
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Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'islands'' or 'island's'?
Suggestion: islands'; island's
...n on the business and livelihood of the islands population. Summers are the time where ...
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Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...pulation on the moped business. In case a large number of households depend on the moped business...
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Line 5, column 639, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...il cannot implement the recommendation. In order to prevent accidents, the council...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tem and better traffic decongestion. In order to reach any conclusion, the argu...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, then, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46103896104 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.181044315 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448051948052 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8598598392 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.681818182 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.40909090909 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158554178317 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464671665362 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453495710581 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917850921412 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657109893191 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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