The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette On Balmer Island where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation the population increases to 100 000 during the summer months To reduce the number of accidents involving

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

In the letter, the writer advises that the town council of Balmer Island should reduce the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies during the summer season, when population on the island increases. The writer's argument hinges on the claims that this reduction in rental can consequently result in reduction in accidents, which was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville whose town council adopted similar measures. However, questions such as the correlation between population, rental and accident increase and the similarity of Seaville and Balmer Island must be answered in order to corroborate this claim.

The writer first claims that due to a population increase during summer time, rentals provided by companies should be decreased to reduce accidents. However, we do not know if a population increase has a direct link with mopeds rental increase. For example, it is useful to know if there are transportation alternatives on the island. People might also get around via boats given that Balmer is an island. Also, we should also ask about the source of the population increase. If this increase is due to tourists visiting the island, it is understandable that rentals will possible increase. However, if there is a military base on Balmer Island and the population increase in summer is due to an influx of soldiers training in the base, it is unlikely that rentals will increase since there population might not need much transportation.

Secondly, the writer supposes that if mopeds rentals decreased, then accidents will also decrease. Yet we need to know if situations on the island would remain the same after a decrease in moped rentals. For example, if mopeds rentals were limited, people might turn to other ways of transportation, such as scooters or bikes. However, if these alternatives are more dangerous then mopeds, or if mopeds started to disregard speed limits due to the decrease of other mopeds on the road, then the number of accidents might actually increase.

Finally, the writer borrows the success story in the neighboring island of Seaville to justify his claim that Balmer Island should adopt similar measures. Though it is tempting to draw conclusions, we must first determine the differences between the two islands. Are there other policies implemented in Seaville at the same time when moped rentals are limited, such as a new restrictions on speed limits? If this is the case, then the reduction in accidents might not be the effect of a reduction in rentals but rather a lower speed limit. Also, are law enforcement efficacies the same in two islands? If citizens in Balmer Island have a reputation of flouting officials and eschewing laws, it is unlikely that the success in Seaville can be replicated.

In conclusion, the writer assumes correlations between population, rental, and accident increase, while overlooking possible discrepancies between Balmer and Seaville Island and presents a cursory argument. Hence, we need to first answer the above questions in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...e islands moped rental companies during the summer season, when population on the island increase...
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Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...population on the island increases. The writers argument hinges on the claims that this...
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Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...hat due to a population increase during summer time, rentals provided by companies should b...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...f these alternatives are more dangerous then mopeds, or if mopeds started to disrega...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'restriction'?
Suggestion: restriction
...oped rentals are limited, such as a new restrictions on speed limits? If this is the case, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 505.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22376237624 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84139441185 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433663366337 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3678358062 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.909090909 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9545454545 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68181818182 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278414892208 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928824982943 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783534220203 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167586914989 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732932673691 0.0628817314937 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 505 350
No. of Characters: 2569 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.74 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.087 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.749 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 216 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.955 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5