The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editor of the Balmer Island Gazette concludes that reducing the daily rentage of mopeds should reduce the accidents. To justify this claim, he reasons that the neighboring island of Seaville reduced their accident rates by similar methodology. The author draws an optimistic picture that the Balmer Island can solve the accident problem by limiting the rentage. However, the author makes several major assumptions that need to be adressed before the town council make the final decision.
The chief problem of the author’s argument is that the author even did not give the accident numbers in the island; therefore, the the significance of the argument is not clear even though the argument mentions the summer population. If the author had provided a detailed analysis of accident rates in years or months, the argument might be more convincing to the reader. Perhaps in this way we can understand the specific time period of the accidents and it leads us to the reasons of accidents.
Even if we accept that the accident numbers are considerably high and need to be argued, he did not mention the reasons of recorded accidents. The accidents might occur because of the low quality of the roads or a machinery problems on mopeds. Perhaps most of the accidents happen in a same place that has a wrong planned roads. Or perhaps, the accountability of the moped sellers is questionable. They might sell some improper machinery that endangers the people’s safety.
Furthermore, the editor readily assumes that Balmer island can utilize similar methodology of the Seaville island. This is again a weak assumption that there is no clear correlation between two islands except they are island. Islands may have different properties that affects the reasons of accidents. For example, the only problem in Seaville might be overuse of the mopeds or the extreme traffic, because the reduction in limit can be solution in these reasons. However, the Balmer island might have different problems like the ones previously mentioned. To make this argument more valid, the author can express the similarities in these islands.
In conclusion, the author makes a contradictive argument that one might be persuasive for the reader, if its premises were true. To bolster it further, the author can provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by detailed analysis of the previous accidents. The argument could be more useful for the final decision, if the editor would have been introduce more solution ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ident numbers in the island; therefore, the the significance of the argument is not cle...
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Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ident numbers in the island; therefore, the the significance of the argument is not cle...
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Line 9, column 328, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...l for the final decision, if the editor would have been introduce more solution ways.
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Line 9, column 344, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'introduced'.
Suggestion: introduced
...decision, if the editor would have been introduce more solution ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20740740741 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73759579321 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2964124904 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.428571429 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195207935554 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661408367323 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667563423321 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115158507176 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071485799572 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.