The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
First of all, the main assumption involved in this letter is that all the moped that are offered by rental companies every day are rented by people. For example, if there was an offer of 50 vehicles per day, but the demand only required 25, imposing a limit on the number of rentals would not solve the problem. For this reason, the first measure to be taken is to develop a study of demand of moped rental, in order to determine if the proposed measure would be useful. If the demand is high enough, this recommendation would be valid in terms of the argument presented in this paragraph.
Secondly, the number of mopeds circulating might not be the problem, but inadequate traffic rules or inappropriate road design. Any of these two facts would lead to accidents, and would affect to the island during summer and during the rest of the year. To determine if this factor is important in the number of accidents, a comparison of the number of accidents in autumn, spring and winter between this island and Seaville would be determining. If the study determines that the number of accidents is similar, it would mean that moped use may be the main cause for this.
Thirdly, it should also be mentioned that, if people are not able to rent a moped, they will have to search for an alternate conveyance. Unless they decide to use public transport, the use of an alternative vehicle would not solve the problem, as it would be as possible to provoke an accident as before. In order to determine what alternative mean of transport would be used by people if a limit in moped rental was imposed, a survey for tourists would be extremely useful. If the results showed that they would use public transport, this measure would be useful.
Finally, it should also be mentioned that it is not necessary for the number of accidents to be directly related to the number of mopeds in the streets. A halving of the number of mopeds could not lead to a halving of the number of accidents, but to decreasing a determined percent, less or more than 50 percent. To answer this question, a statistical study limiting the number of rentals in different ways (for example, to 40 mopeds for two days, then to 30 mopeds for other two days) should be done in order to find a correlation between both variables. This would help to establish the number of mopeds that should be rented in order to minimize economic losses for rental companies and reduce to a minimum the number of accidents related to those vehicles.
In conclusion, these four questions should be addressed in order to establish if the number of mopeds circulating are the reason for the huge number of accidents. When answered, appropriate measures should be studied and taken.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2190 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.572 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.511 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70563674322 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61208900409 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417536534447 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4310227556 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.222222222 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104739166251 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469688425222 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390343361478 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726655102094 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509775359681 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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