The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter to editor of Balmer Island Gazette, predicates that mopeds are the most popular form of transportation in Balmer Island where the population sours up to 100,00 during summer months. It suggests the town council to limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies. By doing so, the author claims, the moped accidents will reduce commensurate to the reduction in mopeds on road due the limit imposed. The claim of the letter is specious and based on assumptions of the author. In order to bolster the claim, the author should have credibly addressed the assumptions made by him.
To begin with, the author precipitously intimates, through the letter, the town council of Balmer Island to qualify the number of mopeds rented by the moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day in order to diminish the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The author does not mention anything about other modes of transport available in the island. The reduction in number of mopeds rented daily may impact on the general public commutation. The author assumes that reduction in number of mopeds will inevitably reduce accidents. There is no assertion about the causes of the road accidents involving mopeds. There may be other causes of accidents like road conditions, mechanical failure of mopeds, erratic riding habits etc. All such probable causes need to be analysed before suggesting a solution to the problem of frequent accidents happening.
The author also applies mathematical proportion directly to practical scenario. According to the letter, 50% reduction in number of mopeds rented per day will help achieving 50% reduction in road accident. This claim is baseless. The author assumes that road accidents are directly proportional to number of mopeds on road.
Furthermore, the author also renders an instance of the neighbouring island of Seaville where reduction in moped rentals resulted in reduction in moped accidents. The letter assumes that whatever holds true for Seaville island will also hold true for Balmer island. There lies the flaw of his argument. The author should have provided enough evidence to substantiate that all the other factors resulting moped accidents like road conditions, mechanical conditions of mopeds, riding habits of rides etc. are similar for both the islands. The author should also have taken into account the other modes of commutation available at both the islands for public i.e. whether limiting number of mopeds on road will create discomfort to public or not.
In sum, the suggestion provided by the letter is flawed and so is the main conclusion of it. The author links moped accidents with the number of mopeds on road which is one of the fundamental flaws of the letter. Also the author tries to conclude that qualifying the number of mopeds on road will reduce the road accidents in Balmer in the same way as that of a neighbouring island Seaville. There is no mention of similarities between the two islands in terms of other conditions causing accidents.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2515 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 212 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.345 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...f mopeds rented daily may impact on the general public commutation. The author assumes that re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 470, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...pact on the general public commutation. The author assumes that reduction in number...
^^^
Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to achieve' or 'achieve'.
Suggestion: to achieve; achieve
...mber of mopeds rented per day will help achieving 50% reduction in road accident. This cl...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...of the fundamental flaws of the letter. Also the author tries to conclude that quali...
^^^^
Line 17, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts in Balmer in the same way as that of a neighbouring island Seaville. There is...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, in conclusion, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 501.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16367265469 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70394185378 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421157684631 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.1430779793 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2692307692 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96153846154 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297677586363 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877557763928 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108360939179 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199607949638 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100278219109 0.0628817314937 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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