Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and
generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Major cities in a country are sources of prime attractions. The claim that governments must provide requisite financial support to the major cities in order to prosper is indeed a valid claim. However, the reason that the reading provides for the claim is questionable. The reason given by the reading is that major cities in a nation are the places where cultural traditions are generated and preserved. This claim is most likely based on observation of the ancient civilizations existed in the world. But it is so far to say that major cities are responsible for generation and preservation of a nation’s cultural traditions.
To begin with, the reading claims that primary cities must receive needed financial support for thriving from the authorities. The claim is very relevant and plausible. Major cities of a nation act as mirror image of the country. The perception of a nation by the global community depends on the perception of the major cities. For example, when one talks about India, the obvious names coming to a global citizen are the cities like Delhi, Mumbai, Kolkata, Chennai etc. So proper patronizing of the major cities helps a country globally admired. Moreover, major cities are usually economic, industrial and business hubs of a country. Prosperous major cities attract national as well as global investments thereby contributing to further economic improvement of the country. Thriving major cities also helps in decreasing unemployment and economic imbalance in society.
However, the reason provided by the reading that primary cities of a country are sources and preservers of a nation’s cultural traditions is not supportable. Indeed there are many antediluvian cities which acted as sources of cultural traditions of the nations. For example, Roman, Mayan, Indus valley civilization etc. were city centric. But that does not mean that always major cities of a nation generates and preserves the cultural traditions of a country. In today’s world, most of the major cities in the world are cosmopolitan cities. These cities have seen people from different parts of the country and the world coming to live. In this era of globalization, we are moving for a global culture. Indeed there are traditional cultures present in the cities. For instance, Delhi is the capital city of India. Many cultural traditions of India have been preserved in Delhi. But if we look through the pages of history the cultures & traditions present in Delhi are not originated at Delhi. They were mixtures of Mughal cultures coming from Central Asia with amalgamation with nearby Hindu kingdom cultures. As a result of globalization, many architectural styles, cultural elements are not profusely seen nowadays in Delhi. One has to visit other small cities, towns or country sides of India where many components of Indian cultures are still preserved.
In sum, the reading makes a very apt claim that major cities of a nation must be funded well by the government to thrive. But the reason provided by the reading in no way supports the claim. Also the claim itself is dubious, baseless and extreme. Government of a nation should fund cities not only for preserving cultural traditions, there are many other factors which the reason fails to address. The reason provided in the reading should consider other factors supporting the claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...cultural traditions is not supportable. Indeed there are many antediluvian cities whic...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...on, we are moving for a global culture. Indeed there are traditional cultures present ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e reading in no way supports the claim. Also the claim itself is dubious, baseless a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2835.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 543.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22099447514 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8127066437 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434622467772 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 895.5 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6442680125 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5142857143 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82857142857 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 21.0 4.83258426966 435% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421934817518 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117472138968 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081697684307 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290428630104 0.150359130593 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493890364554 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.