The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
The letter written to the Balmer Island Gazette argues that the town council of Blamer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds renting from the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. It also adds that a similar plan has worked for the neighboring island of Torseau which enforced similar limits on mopeds rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. The author argues that putting this limit will reduce the moped accidents in Balmer Island. However, the argument lacks pieces of evidence and it is based on many assumptions.
The author here says that the thing which worked for the island of Torseau will also work for Balmer Island which is not true. The two islands may be different in a lot of ways. There may be a difference in population, traffic rules and the number of people having mopeds. Based on the information the population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. There is no data showing how many people having mopeds first of all. It is possible that there is a lack of traffic rules or people of Balmer Island are not following them which is causing accidents. The roads of Balmer Island maybe not in a good condition for driving. There are a number of assumptions that the author has ignored and there is a lack of pieces of evidence to support the argument.
It is also possible that by limiting the number of mopeds renting from 50 per day to 30 per day will cause even more accidents. As people will have now less number of mopeds available so they will overcrowd the moped and this will increase the chances of an accident. Additionally, there is no data available on how much mopeds renting limit enforced by the island of Torseau and the reduction of 50 percent reduction in accidents may have come due to better driving training to drivers, better traffic rules and better infrastructure.
To sum up, the author needs to provide more supporting data and pieces of evidence to prove his argument. The argument provided has many loopholes and is based on illogical reasons and incorrect premises.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1777 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.664 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.944 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 220, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season to reduce the number of accidents invol...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 317, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ally, there is no data available on how much mopeds renting limit enforced by the is...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75590551181 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48615596314 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412073490814 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4794402345 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.588235294 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333014364881 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112142660035 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125833916969 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180120959343 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137436874236 0.0628817314937 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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