The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The above recommendation is not based on logical conclusions, as most of the shopkeepers should consider everyone equally and focus on how to pitch the people who are coming rather that thinking that if these type of people stop coming other type will come. The only suriety in any bussiness is that you don't know what is going to happen next and when is it going to happen. Not all plans work as expected.
Now, looking at the skateboarders we need to understand that they are most of the younger generation, and all of us know that youngsters are mostly interested in shooping. So the store owners should provide them student discounts, ask these students to bring more customers and pay them some amount for doing that. Moreover, give them group discounts. This would definitely help in improving the bussiness of the stores.
The major problem of the plaza owners is that these guys do alot of litter and are involved in vandalism, for this they need to drag their attention towards Las Vegas where every person gets high and does all the above mentioned things at a very high level. Still, we never hear anyone complaining about it because some improvement in the cleaning and security facilities can solve these issues very easily and the overall atmosphere is going to normal.
On the other hand, the people in the support of the above suggestion would say that these individuals don't have enough money to buy our stuff. On this thing they are totally forgeting the fact that people from anywhere if they are not independant they have parents, guardians, etc. Because everyone has some source to pay for their basic needs either its themselves or someone else.
To conclude, the skateborders should not be seen as people who are there to increase problems but they should be targeted to amplify the sales of the stores.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1484 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.667 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.263 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.322 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ly suriety in any bussiness is that you dont know what is going to happen next and w...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...estion would say that these individuals dont have enough money to buy our stuff. On ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, so, still, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 316.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79430379747 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48930374839 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582278481013 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9003224802 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.538461538 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3076923077 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0409024802229 0.218282227539 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0121487412896 0.0743258471296 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0180839836209 0.0701772020484 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0219338944665 0.128457276422 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159533780075 0.0628817314937 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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