"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The above statement looks at the the situation in such a way that the skateboarders are leading to a lot of disturbance and therby forcing the customers out of the plaza. this recommendation does not have a firm ground and there are many logical errors in it.
Firstly, the shop owners of the plaza should target the audiance that is coming to their area rather than complaining about them, Most of the skateboard users are college or school going students. so, they need to provide special discounts for the youngsters and this way a lot of more young people will come to the area. Moreover, we need to understand that the major buyers are the younger generation as the older ones believe in savings.
Secondly, the basic issue faced in the above argument is that of litter and vandalism, this can be easily solved by increasing the security and the cleaning individuals because this is the problem faced by Las vegas on a daily routine and definitely more than the amount they are facing in the plaza and we all know how successful is vegas in solving these issues. Therefore, this isn't a reason to stop the target individuals to come to the shops.
Thirdly, youth roams around in groups so if we treat them nicely then we are not just getting a single customer we are getting a pack of them and all of us know more buyers lead to more sales which shows more profit and every one loves excessive income. which implies that they are going to be a good deal.
In a nutshell, we see that whatever type of customers come we need mould ourselves for them as the sales are depending on them and they are not dependant on in.
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e-rater score report
Out of topic
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1303 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.402 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.396 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.452 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.427 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.822 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.238 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
The above statement looks at the the situation in such a way that the skateb...
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Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
The above statement looks at the the situation in such a way that the skateb...
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Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...forcing the customers out of the plaza. this recommendation does not have a firm gro...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...s are college or school going students. so, they need to provide special discounts...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...n solving these issues. Therefore, this isnt a reason to stop the target individuals...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...n to stop the target individuals to come to the shops. Thirdly, youth roams ar...
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Line 7, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...them and all of us know more buyers lead to more sales which shows more prof...
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Suggestion:
...all of us know more buyers lead to more sales which shows more profit and ...
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Suggestion:
...us know more buyers lead to more sales which shows more profit and every o...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
... more buyers lead to more sales which shows more profit and every one love...
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...uyers lead to more sales which shows more profit and every one loves exces...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...lead to more sales which shows more profit and every one loves excessive i...
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Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more sales which shows more profit and every one loves excessive income. ...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sales which shows more profit and every one loves excessive income. which...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and every one loves excessive income. which implies that they are going to be a goo...
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Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...and every one loves excessive income. which implies that they are going to be a goo...
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Line 9, column 106, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...d mould ourselves for them as the sales are depending on them and they are not dependant on i...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
... are depending on them and they are not dependant on in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53559322034 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44092748254 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552542372881 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.8956691858 57.8364921388 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0618095672282 0.218282227539 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259716218841 0.0743258471296 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330315257361 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0357191228649 0.128457276422 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327044928113 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 48.3550499002 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 12.197005988 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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