The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument above cites several pieces of arguments about why central plaza has seen a decrease in the number of visitors. it states that the influx of skateboarding players induced the decrease in customers to the shopping center. however, with its current base of information, the argument lacks support for this conclusion and needs more specific and exact evidence.
The authors extrapolates that the causes of a decrease in the number of shopper in central plaza was the people who relished skateboarding. however, it may have been other reasons why people halt shopping the place any more. There might have been the matters of the poor quality of service, high expense or parking inconvenience etc. Hence, businesspeople in the plaza should examine the real causes of the phenomena by running more investigations such as questionnaire. Without knowing the concrete reasons and removing skateboarding lovers would not bring any changes.
All these confounding variables aside, perhaps the most questionable thing about the main argument cited is that how we can relate the decreasing trends in the number of shoppers with those who played skateboarding. Conversely against the claim, the skateboaders may have contributed to bringing more profits to stores in the plaza, as they were also potential customers. Were it not for them, the revenue of the plaze stores would have been drastically dropped.
Another error in the argument is based on the preposition that skateboarders deteriorated the exterior view of central plaza through making bandalism and trashes. however, this assumption may have been wrong approach, as other determinents could be involved. it could have been the results of lack of police strolling around the building. Therefore, the plaze should investigate the fundamental reasons of this problem and take an action to resolve.
A close examination of all the assumptions made in the author’s argument reveals that the author does not have enough justification to say that skateboaders are the root cause of a decrease of visiting shoppers. Although the author’s claim certainly points out the coincidence between decreasing visitors and increasing skateboarders in the plaza, he or she ought to research the underlying causal factors more exclusively.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1893 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.303 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.922 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.767 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.382 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...n a decrease in the number of visitors. it states that the influx of skateboarding...
^^
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...se in customers to the shopping center. however, with its current base of information, ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'extrapolate'.
Suggestion: extrapolate
...ecific and exact evidence. The authors extrapolates that the causes of a decrease in the nu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... the people who relished skateboarding. however, it may have been other reasons why peo...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...rs with those who played skateboarding. Conversely against the claim, the skateboaders may...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...a through making bandalism and trashes. however, this assumption may have been wrong ap...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s other determinents could be involved. it could have been the results of lack of ...
^^
Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat skateboaders are the root cause of a decrease of visiting shoppers. Although ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43977591036 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04608422384 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574229691877 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5180263633 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.235294118 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192265175961 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062169901705 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561380530806 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107383929545 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213899807551 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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