The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author predicted that prohibit skateboarding can make business in central plaza return to normal. To justify his conclusion, the writer implied that it is increase of the skateboard user that leads to the decrease of central plaza's business. To further support this idea, the author noted that popularity of skateboarding increased dramatically. More questions need to be answered to prove this theory.
The author mentions that the popularity of skateboarding has increased and the number of shoppers in central plaza decreased. In that case, it must be the skateboard users increased that decreased their business. increased on popularity can't surely lead to increase on users. people may just more likely to watch akateboarding matches on TV instead of doing sport on their own. this kind of increase on popularity can't make users increase. The author should eliminate all possibility to make this logic chain complete.
Besides, the writer indecates that the amount of litter and vandalism increased throughout the plaza. this may have alternative explaination beside the increase on users. maybe it is just because citizens become bad, they tend to throw litter and vandalism. The increase on users can't be the only cause of this effect. further study must be conducted to prove it is skateboard users who throw the litter.
Even though the increase of users is the cause of business decrease, prohibit skateboarding may not recover the business. maybe the people here really love skateboarding, once the prohibition anounced, everyone who loves skateboarding leaves the city. There will be much less people for the store to return to its previously profit.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1380 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.208 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.78 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.951 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Increased
...ncreased that decreased their business. increased on popularity cant surely lead to incre...
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Line 7, column 238, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...their business. increased on popularity cant surely lead to increase on users. peopl...
^^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
... cant surely lead to increase on users. people may just more likely to watch akateboar...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...TV instead of doing sport on their own. this kind of increase on popularity cant mak...
^^^^
Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...wn. this kind of increase on popularity cant make users increase. The author should ...
^^^^
Line 13, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ndalism increased throughout the plaza. this may have alternative explaination besid...
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Line 13, column 172, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...laination beside the increase on users. maybe it is just because citizens become bad,...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 281, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...er and vandalism. The increase on users cant be the only cause of this effect. furth...
^^^^
Line 13, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Further
... cant be the only cause of this effect. further study must be conducted to prove it is ...
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Line 19, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...eboarding may not recover the business. maybe the people here really love skateboardi...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 272, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ing leaves the city. There will be much less people for the store to return to its p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, may, really, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 265.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38113207547 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85454675321 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505660377358 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2503514216 57.8364921388 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.2222222222 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7222222222 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 5.70786347227 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212983327589 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079088016271 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088462277443 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139889497962 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775197484397 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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